the comfort of home
That phrasing seems kind of awkward -- would you agree? And the first sentence, I'm not exactly fully understanding why a large passion for English would interfere in the "comfort of home" at a college; could you explain and perhaps revise it to show what you mean more clearly?
And I do believe, you could go more personal than that; most of your writing is still talking about how impressive the college is. In fact, the english tidbit you threw in you kind of neglected afterwards. Link everything together and have everything flow.
Yale, however, is one of the few exceptions that have attracted me.
^ Sentences like this I feel are very redundant because obviously you are attracted to Yale, but what EXACTLY is it that really makes you fit into Yale?