"This freedom to choose whatever I want" Why Brown Supplement

Please tell us more about your interest in Brown: Why does Brown appeal to you as a college option? Who or what has influenced your decision to apply?

One question I have always found hard to answer is "What subjects do you find interesting?", because it seems that "everything" is apparently not an acceptable response. This lead to one of my main concerns about my degree choices, since taking a double major typically does not leave much room for exploration, due to distribution requirements. However, thanks to the New Curriculum, I can double major in physics and engineering, and still have time to explore subjects which I have never had a chance to study before, like Sanskrit or neuroscience, with a choice of S/NC, so that I don't need to worry about the courses I take for fun affecting my final grades. This freedom to choose whatever I want is one of the largest factors in my applying to Brown.

I get this feeling that the first line doesn't match up properly with the rest of the mini-essay, any suggestions?

Hey,
Just a few things:
One question I have always found hard to answer is "What subjects do you find interesting?" because apparently "everything" is not an acceptable response.

It's very good. The first line isn't too bad, but I see what you mean, it reads a bit awkwardly.
Here are some suggestions:
-I've never been able to answer the question "What are you interested in?" because apparently the answer, "everything" is not an acceptable response.

I don't know if that makes it sound better or not...
-As I scroll down the "interests" menu on my application I am conflicted between A B and C. It's had to chose only three subjects when I'm interested in everything!

Play around with it a little bit until you find something you really like.

I hope this helped!

Hey, I like the beginning but advise against keeping it. "Everything" is not an acceptable response, and it is for the same reason not acceptable here. "Everything" is a typical answer from the kind of kid that does not have any ideas in mind, too preoccupied with fashion or games or other distractions.

I think you have a great theme, though. I just suggest introducing it in a different way. And I suggest this reluctantly, because you really did introduce this in a clever way. It might be my own hangup that makes me want you to not say "everything" in the essay. But you clearly are interested in science rather than psychology, literature, etc. So... let the intro to this essay give you definition, even if it is a little "reductive" in the process.

:-)

I think I'll keep the spirit of the introduction, but maybe "everything" isnt the right word. I certainly agree that you have a point about looking like I have no aim, although I think that my Common App essay and other essays should make sure the admin guys don't get that sort of an impression. Maybe I'll add a sentence or two to fix that problem. Thanks for the help :D