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I had to fulfill a duty to my parents; Cornell: Major, why, academic interests



android21 10 / 56  
Feb 22, 2013   #1
Tell me what you think: it asks what my major is and why it is....also how I will "further my academic interests at Cornell" (what ever that means)...thank you so much in advance...

A few years ago, I had to fulfill a duty to my parents by managing the family wine and spirits store. Constantly innovating the store, sparked my creative zeal, and drove me to achieve top sales. Menial tasks quickly turned to enjoyment and from there I Knew I wanted a deeper knowledge in business.My major will be Economics at Cornell's Applied Economics and Management program and I will strengthen my curriculum by furthering my academic interests in environmental life sciences courses and clubs.

At first, I was indifferent to commerce. I thought it was dull and unrewarding. I was wrong. Within a few months, I had a strong desire to make my family business one of the best in the city. With six identical liquor stores in a one mile radius, competition was fierce and thrilling. It became my obsession to create a large customer base for the business. This entailed tasks of marketing, pricing, and innovating. Every three weeks, I worked with our marketing specialist to target certain types of customers. We mail-advertised expensive wine and scotch to the high income residents of Sand Piper Bay, and we promoted coupons in lower income sectors via Money Saver magazines. To stay competitive, I kept a balanced profit-margin, which allowed our business to operate as well as satisfy customers. I quickly fell in love with every aspect of business. Accordingly, my curriculum at () college shifted to satisfy my passion for business economics. I attended classes such as Macroeconomics to understand how the world market functioned, and applied simple supply and demand concepts to my family business.

Unquestionably, my family wine and spirits store was the reason I fell in love with business, specifically applied economics. However, my time spent analyzing different types of businesses created my own vision. Growing up in Florida was a treat. I got to explore the soothing hot springs of Apoka, the Everglades of South Florida, and the majestic reefs of Key West. I have an undying love for nature, and I want to preserve the beauty. I am done standing on a silent platform screaming at big corporations and the government only to be dismissed, screw the norm, I will lead the war for change by introducing a revamped and Eco-friendly form of retail. Cornell's Applied Economics and Management program provides a variety of courses in life sciences that will supplement my finance concentration to make my dream real. The program will enable me to take classes such as "Environmental Economics" to hopefully lead the retail industry into low cost/high quality products without the environmental pollutants. Thus, I will further my academic interest in Agribusiness, Environmental & Resource Economics, and Accounting to to create a strong foundation for my business. Also, I will join initiatives such as the "Environmental Law Society" to model my future business in accordance to regulation, and to push for more environmental laws.

Managing my family's wine & spirits store revitalized my purpose and influenced me to major in my new found passion, applied economics. Cornell's multi-faceted AEM program involves many aspects of academia from Finance to Environmental business, which will help me become a versatile businessman who can influence environmental adherence in the retail industry. With the strong program Cornell has to offer, my vision is impenetrable.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Feb 23, 2013   #3
Tell me what you think: it asks what my major is and why it is....also how I will "further my academic interests at Cornell" (what ever that means)...thank you so much in advance...

You write too well, so I don't think you really need to seek advice :D

I had to fulfill a duty to my parents by managing the family wine and spirits store

... I'm wondering whether you should capitalize the store part to attract attention to it!

At first, I was indifferent to commerce; I thought it was dull and unless rewarding

...I changed punctuation and reduced the negative effect of "unrewarding"

Within a few months, I had a strong desire to make my family business one ofto be the best in the city.With six identical liquor stores with in a one mile radius, competition was fierce, yetand thrilling.

Every three weeks, I worked with our marketing specialist to target certain types of customerscustomer segments .

However, my time spent on analyzing different types of businesses created my own vision

I have an undying love for nature, and I want to preserve theits beauty.

It's excellent writing as always... My suggestions are just for you to consider ! :)
OP android21 10 / 56  
Feb 24, 2013   #4
Thank you again for your corrections and kind words.
farbodsalahi 5 / 7  
Feb 26, 2013   #5
it was one the best writing which i have red.
congratulation dude.


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