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Prompt: Many people claim that rock music is a bad influnce on young people.
They feel it encourages drug use and in appropriate behavior. Other believe that rock music is good entertainment. They don't think that it causes social problem.
In an essay of 200 words, discuss the influence of rock music on young people. You may discuss positive or negative influences, or both. Be specific and use examples to support your view.
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Because rock music is good entertainment for everyone especially young people,
it influences good physical condition, improvement of exercise performance and the practical skill.
Rock music can improve young people with their good physical condition.
While listening to rock music, the heart rate increases, and then the heart muscles start working heavily to burn fat and cholesterol, the blood flows smoothly. In addition, the deep-breath from inhaling and exhaling can help the lungs to utilize oxygen effectively. As a result, the body automatically releases beta-endorphin. These have made young people to stay fit and look firm.
Rock music helps young people to improve an exercise performance especially who find exercise boring. Its rhythm motives their mood to participate and enjoy in every movement of the song rather than exercise. I was one of them. After I saw aerobic exercise with rock music at a gym, my exercise attitude changed. I can enjoy rock music as well as exercise in the same time. Furthermore, many sports clubs have used rock music to motivate young people mood.
Rock music is able to encourage young people to gain in the practical skill.
After listening to rock music, many of them are inspired to learn the musical instruments such as the guitar or drum. The musical instruments' practice has made perfect, young people enjoy playing it from basic to advance level. This effort can make them success as famous rock music in the future. For example, The Beatles is a very famous and successful rock music band.
In conclusion, many young people have been influenced by rock music. They can improve their good physical condition, exercise performance and practical skill. With all of positive influences, there is no wonder that rock music is good entertainment for young people.
Can please review my essay.
Your advice is much appreciated.
Best regards,
Pam
Prompt: Many people claim that rock music is a bad influnce on young people.
They feel it encourages drug use and in appropriate behavior. Other believe that rock music is good entertainment. They don't think that it causes social problem.
In an essay of 200 words, discuss the influence of rock music on young people. You may discuss positive or negative influences, or both. Be specific and use examples to support your view.
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Because rock music is good entertainment for everyone especially young people,
it influences good physical condition, improvement of exercise performance and the practical skill.
Rock music can improve young people with their good physical condition.
While listening to rock music, the heart rate increases, and then the heart muscles start working heavily to burn fat and cholesterol, the blood flows smoothly. In addition, the deep-breath from inhaling and exhaling can help the lungs to utilize oxygen effectively. As a result, the body automatically releases beta-endorphin. These have made young people to stay fit and look firm.
Rock music helps young people to improve an exercise performance especially who find exercise boring. Its rhythm motives their mood to participate and enjoy in every movement of the song rather than exercise. I was one of them. After I saw aerobic exercise with rock music at a gym, my exercise attitude changed. I can enjoy rock music as well as exercise in the same time. Furthermore, many sports clubs have used rock music to motivate young people mood.
Rock music is able to encourage young people to gain in the practical skill.
After listening to rock music, many of them are inspired to learn the musical instruments such as the guitar or drum. The musical instruments' practice has made perfect, young people enjoy playing it from basic to advance level. This effort can make them success as famous rock music in the future. For example, The Beatles is a very famous and successful rock music band.
In conclusion, many young people have been influenced by rock music. They can improve their good physical condition, exercise performance and practical skill. With all of positive influences, there is no wonder that rock music is good entertainment for young people.
