"The Gentle Giant" college personal essay (topic of my choice)

The Gentle Giant"

It was in Kindergarten when I first discovered what I wanted to be. Mrs. Hale asked my "Chazz what do you want to be when you grow up?" I replied "a police officer so I could eat donuts." Standing 4 feet 11 inches and wearing a size seven shoe the expectations on being a police officer seemed unreal in the eyes of my peers; I was to become the next Shaq.

In my elementary years I was the tallest kid in the school. I had no interest in basketball. Playing video games and eating food was my passion. Those were the only goals that I worried about putting in the basket. Parents made unnecessary comments to their children that made me feel uncomfortable. One parent said "Jack, why are you with that older boy?" Jack said "mom he is in my grade, he is only 9. People would just look at me and just stare at me like I was this "giant". People would call me big foot, Sasquatch, and all other names that caused me to feel awkward. Usually the big kid picks on the little ones, but instead I was their main target. All the emotions and feelings that were bottled up inside me, I was more determined to let people see who the real Chazz Miller was.

From the third grade to the eighth grade, I made nothing but A's and B's. I dedicated myself to reading two books every week and devoting myself to studies, rather than playing outside with my friends. The perception of being just a basketball player started to change. Students would see my grades and would ask me if I could help them out on a few pointers. For the first time in my life I felt like I was more than just a basketball player. People saw the kindness and helpfulness that I offered. Standing tall at 6 '5 and wearing a size 17 shoes, people gave me the name "Gentle Giant".

Today people look up to me as a leader and caring person. Call police officer Chazz and help will be on the way. In my senior year I got student of the month award for tutoring a group of 30 kids in Chemistry before exams. Teachers were getting swamped by all the students coming in and asking for help, so I stepped in and took over. As a result, 30 students passed with 80's and above. My friends joke with me and tell me that one day I will be a teacher. It gives me great comfort to give help to people that need it. I take great pride to say that I am a scholar athlete who is 6'8 and has a 3.8 GPA. The timeless hours and dedication that I invested in myself to prove to people that I am nothing paid off. I said I wanted to become a police officer to eat donuts, but now I have a purpose to help people.

Hi there,
I was touched by this essay, its quite..nice (in a good way, because nice often doesnt describe much). at times though I felt you were having a dialog with a friend "he asked and i relpied, he said so then I said..." try to make it flow a little better and there were a couple of spelling mistakes, my to me at the beginning and others i cant think of off the top of my head. overall good job, I liked it