Hello,
I am applying to Cornell as a biology major and I just wrote one of my supplementary essays. The word limit is 500 but this is only 246 words long.
Please read over it and give me some feedback!! Thank you in advance :D
I have always had a gratitude for science and its rapid development. As a young child, I suffered through Bacterial Meningitis along with months of living in the ER. If it were not for the doctors with capabilities to cure my disease, I would not be living the wonderful life I am living today. The development of science fascinates me and intrigues me to think that some of the incurable diseases today may turn treatable in just a few decades. My inquiry about my past disease opened my eyes to other deadly diseases around the world. For instance, I found out that Alzheimer's disease, a brain disease suffered by my own grandfather, strikes 50% of those who passed their eightieth birthday, and in result, affects millions of people around the world. I want to fight for prevention of worldly diseases to stop unnecessary deaths and disabilities. Cornell University will open up many opportunities that will lead me to fulfill this dream of mine. While there are many academic and honors programs offered at Cornell, Biology Scholars Program especially seized me. With an opportunity to work with the faculty and other students in internship and research programs, I will meet others of similar interests and keep focus on my goal and future. I truly feel that I have been given a second chance at my life to contribute something to the world. Just like the doctors that rescued my life, I am determined to become lifesaving physician.
I am applying to Cornell as a biology major and I just wrote one of my supplementary essays. The word limit is 500 but this is only 246 words long.
Please read over it and give me some feedback!! Thank you in advance :D
I have always had a gratitude for science and its rapid development. As a young child, I suffered through Bacterial Meningitis along with months of living in the ER. If it were not for the doctors with capabilities to cure my disease, I would not be living the wonderful life I am living today. The development of science fascinates me and intrigues me to think that some of the incurable diseases today may turn treatable in just a few decades. My inquiry about my past disease opened my eyes to other deadly diseases around the world. For instance, I found out that Alzheimer's disease, a brain disease suffered by my own grandfather, strikes 50% of those who passed their eightieth birthday, and in result, affects millions of people around the world. I want to fight for prevention of worldly diseases to stop unnecessary deaths and disabilities. Cornell University will open up many opportunities that will lead me to fulfill this dream of mine. While there are many academic and honors programs offered at Cornell, Biology Scholars Program especially seized me. With an opportunity to work with the faculty and other students in internship and research programs, I will meet others of similar interests and keep focus on my goal and future. I truly feel that I have been given a second chance at my life to contribute something to the world. Just like the doctors that rescued my life, I am determined to become lifesaving physician.
