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Topic: Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.
I am not using my great great grandfathers actual name, just for privacy reasons.
Essay:
It's safe to say that the closest ones in our lives have a great impact on who we become, although sometimes, those who we don't know are the ones who change our outlook on life the most. I have never met this man and I never will, yet the blood we share means a stronger connection to me than my connection to those who i've known for years. He is my great great grandfather, (NAME), a leader who served as the president of El Salvador years (----) through (----).
He was a man so charismatic with such patience, even while being tied to presidential responsibilities. A certain time throughout the week was always set aside to tend to anyone who wanted to be heard. A line of people would show up, sometimes needing guidance, sometimes merely needing someone to listen. No person's problems were turned away no matter their social class or situation.
I grew up hearing the wonderful stories about him and his caring ways. The sacrifices he has made for the good of the people are countless. Throughout the years I have worked on shaping myself into a person he would be proud to call family, just as I am to call him.
It is very true that I would not be the way I am today if it weren't for the inspirational stories that have been passed down to me through family members. I have allowed myself absorb the inner beauty of my great great grandfather. His compassion and love for those he had never met is a quality I strive to keep up at all times. He created a life with as little negativity as possible, a beautiful way to live that I have began to live as well. I have grown to be someone who listens, as well as one less person who refuses to unnecessarily judge others without justification. I am a person who's future holds great opportunities as I share the love I've learned to give.
Topic: Write an essay in which you tell us about someone who has made an impact on your life and explain how and why this person is important to you.
I am not using my great great grandfathers actual name, just for privacy reasons.
Essay:
It's safe to say that the closest ones in our lives have a great impact on who we become, although sometimes, those who we don't know are the ones who change our outlook on life the most. I have never met this man and I never will, yet the blood we share means a stronger connection to me than my connection to those who i've known for years. He is my great great grandfather, (NAME), a leader who served as the president of El Salvador years (----) through (----).
He was a man so charismatic with such patience, even while being tied to presidential responsibilities. A certain time throughout the week was always set aside to tend to anyone who wanted to be heard. A line of people would show up, sometimes needing guidance, sometimes merely needing someone to listen. No person's problems were turned away no matter their social class or situation.
I grew up hearing the wonderful stories about him and his caring ways. The sacrifices he has made for the good of the people are countless. Throughout the years I have worked on shaping myself into a person he would be proud to call family, just as I am to call him.
It is very true that I would not be the way I am today if it weren't for the inspirational stories that have been passed down to me through family members. I have allowed myself absorb the inner beauty of my great great grandfather. His compassion and love for those he had never met is a quality I strive to keep up at all times. He created a life with as little negativity as possible, a beautiful way to live that I have began to live as well. I have grown to be someone who listens, as well as one less person who refuses to unnecessarily judge others without justification. I am a person who's future holds great opportunities as I share the love I've learned to give.
