I have just written my "greatest" and one and only contribution. Please comment upon my essay and tell me if I can add something more to it. My writing is often not clear and obviously not perfect... So I am very open to criticisms. Thank you!!!
What would be your greatest contribution to the Franklin and Marshall community?The purpose of Franklin and Marshall is to serve the global community as it holds the theme of being a "global institution." I truly feel that the world has to develop equally and internationally. Every time I ponder upon the thought of global enhancement, the gap between the developed and the least developed countries of this world triggers me to question, "Does it make us any happier in being able to lead a lavish and comfortable life while others may be lying on the streets struggling for a day's meal?" Today, the Haitians are suffering serious problems, Somalians alike. Our concern must be greater towards solving the problems of the world rather than in simply living a normal life.
It has actually been a blessing in disguise to be a citizen of a third world country like Nepal. Having been exposed to the elements of constant upheaval in Nepal, I am well aware and better able to relate the issues of my country in a global context. The theme of "think global, act local" does not convince me as I believe in evenness; evenness in the community we all share. Therefore, we must step ahead to enhance not only our vicinity but the world as a whole. I feel that a big corporate house or a factory in front of a slum has no reason to be called favorably placed or prosperous because it lacks similitude with its neighborhood. Likewise, the disparity amongst the nations of the world today makes it look incomplete. To make it better, we all should think globally and act globally too.
Franklin and Marshall's mission of "making a difference globally", rightly resonates with my desire to contribute meaningfully to my community and eventually to the world. My greatest contribution to Franklin and Marshall, which is largely committed to serving the global world, would be supporting its mission by starting from my own country, committing to build greater access, opportunity and equity to the people of Nepal. If only I could play a role in creating professionalism and bringing reform among the local youths in the remote areas of Nepal, the world would definitely be fairer to these people who are bound by limited access in life. On the other hand, it could obtain a better future with a more diverse pool of competent intellects who are devoted to its advancement.
Therefore, my goal is to combine excellence in education and diversity so that I am able to apply what I have learned from the remote regions of Nepal and then eradicate inadequacies in those areas, thus representing Franklin and Marshall College. I believe I can make a difference by alleviating rural poverty with new and sustainable means of employment suitable for the Nepalese terrain. So, as a member of the vibrant community of Franklin and Marshall, I expect to extend my hands in upgrading the living standards of the indigenous people of Nepal. The endeavor, however small it may seem, will indeed prove effectual in inspiring other people to start from their own immediate area. Throughout, I will be acting for Franklin and Marshall, thus stressing upon its significance and essence of global education.
Every time I ponder
upon the thought of global enhancement, the gap between the developed and the least developed countries
...upheaval in Nepal, I am well aware of, and better able to relate to the issues of my country in a global context.
Likewise, the disparity between the nations of the world today makes...
Throughout, I will be acting for Franklin and Marshall, thus stressing the significance and essence of global education.
Hi Susan.. Tnx alot again. I just wanted to make sure if this essay is gonna work.. Don't you think its a bit cheesy? Please let me know.
Oh, hi! No, it is not cheesy! I did find another small thing though;
...supporting its mission by starting 'with' or 'in' my own country,...
Good luck and have fun in school!
tnx alot!!! :-)
hey guess what? I too am from Nepal and applying to FandM. And, I am also currently working on the same essay.
oh.. great! Can you post it here so that I can have a look on your work?
i have posted an essay for FandM...u can find it...today is the deadline...have u sent the supplement?
and do u think sharing essays is good and safe?
Huh? ofcourse it is.. we are sharing ideas here.. not essays.. tnx.. i will find it.. btw its still 31st here.. the deadlines 1st.. so i am posting on the deadline.. :)