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Growing up in Art, and Grade Stress ~ UCF prompts



JulieB 2 / 4  
Jan 23, 2010   #1
After realizing the word count was 500 words for BOTH prompts, I defiantly had some word cutting to do. I hope my message remained concise. Any suggestions are appreciated.

How has your family history, culture or environment influenced who you are?

My family history comprises of interaction, rather than blood. Adopted as a baby from Lima, Peru I was brought to states at four months. There is no record of my birth parents, the only evidence, and the genetic roots that paint my body. In essence I am a first generation, the first mold. This pattern of uniqueness would remain a constant.

Before I could stand, I was thrown into a world of art. Nights were spent listening to classical music. Days were spent learning about the famous artists, diving into the words of Twain, Shakespeare, and Orwell. For years I believed every child lived this way. It never occurred to me, most children didn't converse about politics and they didn't have long talks about ethics. My parents instilled a thirst for theological exploration. At a young age I was allowed to collect pieces of knowledge and comprise my own, unique view on the world.

This foundation of free thought has remained with me, shaping me into a collage of views, away from the mainstream.

Liebe 1 / 524  
Jan 24, 2010   #2
My family history comprises of interaction, rather than blood.

^Can a family history consist of blood?

Adopted as a baby from Lima, Peru I was brought to states at four months.

^United States?

There is no record of my birth parents, the only evidence, and the genetic roots that paint my body.

^Does not make sense. The first clause does, but whatever proceeds it does not.

In essence I am a first generation, the first mold. This pattern of uniqueness would remain a constant.

^Where is this coming from?

Before I could stand, I was thrown into a world of art. Nights were spent listening to classical music. Days were spent learning about the famous artists, diving into the words of Twain, Shakespeare, and Orwell. F

^You were learning about Twain and Orwell, before you could stand?

At a young age I was allowed to collect pieces of knowledge and comprise my own, unique view on the world.

^How are your views unique exactly?

There was a time I was unable to live.

^Yea, there is nothing in your second paragraph that conveys the fact that you were unable to live or that you were dieing, or on the verge of dieing.
EF_Kevin 8 / 13052  
Jan 25, 2010   #3
My family bonds are comprised of interaction rather than blood. Adopted as a baby from Lima, Peru (they know where Lima is) I was brought to the United States at four months old . There is no record of my birth parents; the only evidence of the genetic roots is my physical body.

In essence I am a first generation, the first mold. ------- wow, very good! You are a deep thinker, for sure.

This pattern of uniqueness would remain a constant; my vision for the future is filled wi th ___________________.

:-)


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