hello all. this is my supplement for GW, here's the prompt: Attach an essay of no more than 500 words indicating what most influenced you to apply to The George Washington University (required of all applicants). If you are applying to an accelerated or special program, also explain why you are interested in this program at GW.
Any feedback would be appreciated. Also, I'm three words over the limit, do you think that's a big deal? Thank you in advance!
"That's a nice building," my dad calmly remarked as we turned the corner.
"Hmm, yea it is," I said as I looked over. I did a double take when I noticed the unique East-Asian style of architecture. "It's a gorgeous building..." I said as realization spread over me. "I think that was the Japanese Embassy. Dad! We just drove by the Japanese Embassy!" After my mini-episode resulting from the awe of being so close to something I've only studied through literature, I did not think this visit could get any better. Amazingly, I was wrong.
After weeks of online research, my expectations for the actual visit to the George Washington University were quite high. I'd read, re-read and almost memorized various aspects of the different schools within the university, ranging from the unofficial hippo mascot to the Capital Markets Trading room. My seed of interest in the school was planted when I noticed GWU's leading role in international affairs education with the excellence of the Elliot School to the dedication towards research projects like the Institute of International Economic Policy.
I am completely enamored by international relations, but felt that something was missing. As I delved deeper into understanding the university, I found what I feel is "missing" may be satisfied by the additional study of business, economics or possibly law next to international affairs. What I was not expecting was the chance to choose a fitting field of study at a place like GW that fosters to all of them. The school's core curriculum is the ideal way for a student like myself to learn more about a particular area of interest before choosing it as a major.
Just as well, GWU does something many schools claim but cannot live up to and that is the ability to go farther than academics. As a student guide skillfully walked backwards while explaining various social aspects of the school, I simply fell more in love with "G-Dub." Despite the urban location, I found a sense of school spirit was quite present through the posters advertising different events and student organizations. Signs for Raaja Yoga and a Bhangra dance competition covered the windows of buildings as the guide explained student involvement within the school also reached out to the DC community and abroad through internships and volunteer work. Just as I continue work with Habitat for Humanity in DC, I hope to learn more about working with non-governmental organizations. An internship with the Council on Foreign Relations would allow me to hone my research skills and learn about NGOs.
I was hooked to the George Washington University because of its expertise in international studies, drawn in by its ideal location for such a field of study and have only been carried in deeper by the multitude of diverse people and exciting opportunities that would come my way once a student. I have been searching for a school that fosters academic development through a multitude of learning experiences and George Washington University does that and more.
Your first paragraph is so impressive! It really succeeds in PROVING that you have a deep sense of appreciation for this kind of art.
One idea I have for you, though, is to add some mention of international relations in that first paragraph; as you hae it now, it seems like you are about to write an essay about your interest in architecture!
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I was hooked to the George Washington University hooked my attention with its expertise offerings in international studies, and it drew me in by...
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