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"My Inspiration"
In every hard work, there's a success in the end. First of all, I grew up with a broken family. There was a time that I want to give up, but I've tried not to because if I give up how can I support my family? At young age, I've overcome lots of challenges in life. These challenges, taught me how to be strong to face difficult situations and overcome entire obstacles in life.
The dream of every parent is to see their children make it life rather than turning out miserable, and so was the dream of my parents. Although we never agreed on certain issues, they have really inspired me in every aspect of my life. I remembered the day when we encountered a difficult situation, I did not know what to do because my father lost his job, so my mother had to work abroad to fulfill our needs.
Three years ago when I'm still in Philippines, I experienced how life is really difficult without money. We are lucky if we eat once. I ask myself what would happen next to us. I told myself that if I had my own family, I wouldn't let my children face poverty because I don't want them to sacrifice. I would try to provide them a comfortable atmosphere for living to have a better life than me. I don't want to conquer this anymore. Because of my experiences, this obstacle steers me to be inspired and be motivated in life.
At the age of fifteen, my Mother told me about my Aunt's success. She told me that my Aunt's family is broken too. With her fighting spirits, she stays strong and reaches her dreams. We both grew up with a broken family. Now, she is a flight attendant in Qatar. Everything that she did ends up to success. She was my inspiration in life. I am always telling to myself that "I want to be a flight attendant, I should follow her steps," steps to success.
At the age of sixteen, my stepfather decided to adopt me and my brother. When the day I came here, I was really happy but had a little bit sadness because my sister and my real father were left in the Philippines, but I know it is okay because this would help me to have a better life. Then I told myself that when I'm done in college, I will bring my father here. I'm still hoping that one day, we can be complete again and all of us have a better life pursuing our own dreams.
Life here in the U.S.A. looks like the same in Philippines, but here, study first, pay later. In Philippines, we need to pay tuition first before we enter to a private school. I remembered one time, I see a homeless old man, I want to help him but I don't have anything to support him. I was disappointed that I could not help him. One thing that I see, I need to be responsible and be strong to pursue my goals. In order to help this old man, to help my family, I need to study hard and earn money. Education is my only key to success.
When I started studying here, I met some new friends. I thought that they are good friends of mine, but when I noticed that they are fake friends, I decided to avoid them. Some of them are making fun of me. Then, one time when I was in the hallway, they bullied me but one thing that I did not give up is to prove to them that even if they bullied me many times, I can be successful in life. I wanted to prove them that they're wrong. Those people who put me down became my inspiration in life. It taught me that I should be wise for choosing my true friend.
Sometimes I want to give up, but because of the experiences that I've been through it gives me an inspiration to finish high school and go to a four year college. I don't want to live in a fabulous life. I just want to live with a simple life that I can help other people including my family. In fact, after high school I will look for a scholarship or a financial aid to go to a four year college course in college. After college, I will find a better job and I will work hard to support my family.
Not because you are poor, you will give up. You should not be. You can be an inspiration to others, so they can be responsible in life. Learn from the experiences that would be interesting to you in order to reach your dreams. Do not get easily affected to what you hear about you. Keep in mind, always be strong and be positive in life. If you are in the right track, you will probably more fortunate.
In life, sometimes you'll fail, sometimes you'll succeed, or vice-versa. But if you are a hard working person, you will reach your dream and have a better life. I know that some of the time I fail, but I do not give up because I always put in my mind that all of these are for my family, they should be my first priority before others. I want them to be proud of me by studying hard and reaching my real dreams. I am really thankful that I still have a better life today; I learn many things about my family and myself. No matter what happen, I will do my best to prove that I'm worth it with my family.
"My Inspiration"
In every hard work, there's a success in the end. First of all, I grew up with a broken family. There was a time that I want to give up, but I've tried not to because if I give up how can I support my family? At young age, I've overcome lots of challenges in life. These challenges, taught me how to be strong to face difficult situations and overcome entire obstacles in life.
The dream of every parent is to see their children make it life rather than turning out miserable, and so was the dream of my parents. Although we never agreed on certain issues, they have really inspired me in every aspect of my life. I remembered the day when we encountered a difficult situation, I did not know what to do because my father lost his job, so my mother had to work abroad to fulfill our needs.
Three years ago when I'm still in Philippines, I experienced how life is really difficult without money. We are lucky if we eat once. I ask myself what would happen next to us. I told myself that if I had my own family, I wouldn't let my children face poverty because I don't want them to sacrifice. I would try to provide them a comfortable atmosphere for living to have a better life than me. I don't want to conquer this anymore. Because of my experiences, this obstacle steers me to be inspired and be motivated in life.
At the age of fifteen, my Mother told me about my Aunt's success. She told me that my Aunt's family is broken too. With her fighting spirits, she stays strong and reaches her dreams. We both grew up with a broken family. Now, she is a flight attendant in Qatar. Everything that she did ends up to success. She was my inspiration in life. I am always telling to myself that "I want to be a flight attendant, I should follow her steps," steps to success.
At the age of sixteen, my stepfather decided to adopt me and my brother. When the day I came here, I was really happy but had a little bit sadness because my sister and my real father were left in the Philippines, but I know it is okay because this would help me to have a better life. Then I told myself that when I'm done in college, I will bring my father here. I'm still hoping that one day, we can be complete again and all of us have a better life pursuing our own dreams.
Life here in the U.S.A. looks like the same in Philippines, but here, study first, pay later. In Philippines, we need to pay tuition first before we enter to a private school. I remembered one time, I see a homeless old man, I want to help him but I don't have anything to support him. I was disappointed that I could not help him. One thing that I see, I need to be responsible and be strong to pursue my goals. In order to help this old man, to help my family, I need to study hard and earn money. Education is my only key to success.
When I started studying here, I met some new friends. I thought that they are good friends of mine, but when I noticed that they are fake friends, I decided to avoid them. Some of them are making fun of me. Then, one time when I was in the hallway, they bullied me but one thing that I did not give up is to prove to them that even if they bullied me many times, I can be successful in life. I wanted to prove them that they're wrong. Those people who put me down became my inspiration in life. It taught me that I should be wise for choosing my true friend.
Sometimes I want to give up, but because of the experiences that I've been through it gives me an inspiration to finish high school and go to a four year college. I don't want to live in a fabulous life. I just want to live with a simple life that I can help other people including my family. In fact, after high school I will look for a scholarship or a financial aid to go to a four year college course in college. After college, I will find a better job and I will work hard to support my family.
Not because you are poor, you will give up. You should not be. You can be an inspiration to others, so they can be responsible in life. Learn from the experiences that would be interesting to you in order to reach your dreams. Do not get easily affected to what you hear about you. Keep in mind, always be strong and be positive in life. If you are in the right track, you will probably more fortunate.
In life, sometimes you'll fail, sometimes you'll succeed, or vice-versa. But if you are a hard working person, you will reach your dream and have a better life. I know that some of the time I fail, but I do not give up because I always put in my mind that all of these are for my family, they should be my first priority before others. I want them to be proud of me by studying hard and reaching my real dreams. I am really thankful that I still have a better life today; I learn many things about my family and myself. No matter what happen, I will do my best to prove that I'm worth it with my family.
