Guys, I have to apply to NCSU in two days and I am stuck with this essay. Please critique it. Also, I am terribly exceeding the word limit. Tell me how to make it short. Any criticism appreciated. Thanks!
PROMPT- Answer in not more than 500 characters, why you chose this as your major.
At the age of ten, while playing, I dropped my Barbie doll from my bed and her left leg broke. Unable to see her limp, I tied a stick at the missing leg's place and put a full length gown on her to hide it. Little did I know, at that time, that this job would interest me and propel me to make a career in it.
For as long as I can remember, I have enjoyed helping people, whether it was giving advice or being there when they needed support. I also liked technology. My grandfather repairs all the household items, himself, when they break down. As a child, I found it very exciting to sit beside him and watch him mend the device. When it would start working, I used to feel as if some magic took place and think my grandpa to be a hero. As I grew up, this childhood fascination augmented and I got inquisitive to know how the gadgets around me work. Many a time, I would just dissemble a device just to have a look at its construction. After quite a lot of research and endless hours of discussion with my parents, I decided that Biomedical Engineering would be the perfect field for the amalgamation of my love for technology and my desire to help others.
PROMPT- Answer in not more than 500 characters, why you chose this as your major.
At the age of ten, while playing, I dropped my Barbie doll from my bed and her left leg broke. Unable to see her limp, I tied a stick at the missing leg's place and put a full length gown on her to hide it. Little did I know, at that time, that this job would interest me and propel me to make a career in it.
For as long as I can remember, I have enjoyed helping people, whether it was giving advice or being there when they needed support. I also liked technology. My grandfather repairs all the household items, himself, when they break down. As a child, I found it very exciting to sit beside him and watch him mend the device. When it would start working, I used to feel as if some magic took place and think my grandpa to be a hero. As I grew up, this childhood fascination augmented and I got inquisitive to know how the gadgets around me work. Many a time, I would just dissemble a device just to have a look at its construction. After quite a lot of research and endless hours of discussion with my parents, I decided that Biomedical Engineering would be the perfect field for the amalgamation of my love for technology and my desire to help others.
