Does my high school record accurately represent your academic abilities. MSU essay

Honestly, I do not feel that my high school records accurately represent my academic abilities, because I am not born in United States. When I first came to United States, I didn't understand any English, but, I still have to go to school with the different language students. When I just start of High School, not understanding what the teacher speak it's not all, also cannot communicate with the classmates about the homework. So, I often cannot finish the homework, and the examination test is not satisfactory. In my first 2 years of high school was when I really struggled academically, because I would get 2.8's on my report card. It really gives me a hard time to bring up my grade. Disappointed, I knew that I had to do better if I wanted to attend college. Within two years, I try very hard on learning English, and it has been improved, and my grade had been bringing up. Still, I have the problem on the ACT, mostly because English is not my first language, and there will always have some obstacles in the reading ability, especially there is a time limit to the test. Furthermore, I really don't have time to practice my ACT skill, because my parents own a restaurant, owing to the financial crisis, my parents didn't have the ability to hire anyone to work for them. Instead, my time has been taking from it, I have to help them after school every day, and I cannot learn all the ACT skill from school course other than study guide. With this responsibility left me with no time to do homework, study for tests, or be a regular teenager. Consequence, I cannot be good studying, but I do not blame on my parents because I know that they just want to be able to afford me and my brother's tuition. I believe, if I first came to United States with the same level of English as now, I can certainly do much better than now. Ultimately, I understand that although life cannot be rewind like a type, I should not let the results of my past reflect my future. My grades in high school do not reflect my drive or intelligence, but with this I have the determination to achieve greatness in Michigan State University.

When I first came to United States, I didn't understand any English, but, I still have to go to school with the was immersed with different language-speaking students.

Well, your English seems to be coming along smoothly! As I'm sure you are aware, it isn't entirely correct, grammatically speaking. However, I feel you answered the question which was the basis for this essay in a very effective and passionate way. The portrayal of your struggle and desire to do better absolutely cuts right through the language barrier in my opinion. In addition, in structural terms, you have absolutely created an organized and well-stated essay.

Good luck!