Discuss the subjects with which you had difficulty. What factors do you believe contributed to your difficulties? How have you dealt with them so they will not cause problems for you again? In what areas have you experienced the greatest improvement? What problem areas remain?
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When I was younger, history seemed like the most pointless subject in the world. "Why do I need to learn this if it already happened? How are dead people and dead events going to be of use?" Because I truly didn't find history the least bit enjoyable, I tended to not try. Memorizing dates and names of people was so exhausting and I never seemed to remember them except for the day of the test.
As I learned more and more about the history of Texas, the United States, and the World, I came to realize the important of our past. I came to realize that in order to truly understand who we are and how we came to be, we need to understand our past. My history teacher my sophomore year, Mrs. Hirshey, truly inspired me by reminding the class that the names we memorized were people just like us. They struggled, had problems, experienced war, experienced poverty, high taxes, and if we don't want to make the same mistakes they made, we need to make sure that we know how they dealt with their problems. I came to realize that history does repeat itself and if only people realized that people before had the same problems, we could learn from them and get ideas from how they solved or didn't solve their issues.
As I became more interested in history, I actually learn the names of people as if they where new friends whose name I couldn't help but remember. Dates became as important as a family member's birthdays. Columbus day and president's day became something to truly celebrate. These days were days to celebrate my countries past.
Now, whenever I find myself apathetic towards a subject, I remember how finding relevance to my own life helped me do better in a subject. Now, my only problem is caring about so many eras in history. I can't find time to get to know all the influential people in the Italy's reconnaissance period and the important philosophers who shaped our government's principles such as Locke!
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I think you've written a good essay. I do have some editing suggestions for you:
As I learned more and more about the history of Texas, the United States, and the world, I came to realize the importance of our past.
As I became more interested in history, I actually learned the names of people as if they were new friends whose names I couldn't help but remember.
Dates became as important as a family member's birthday. Columbus Day and President's Day became something to truly celebrate. These days were days to celebrate my country's past.
I can't find time to get to know all the influential people in Italy's Renaissance period and the important philosophers who shaped our government's principles such as Locke!
I think your conclusion needs a bit more. Perhaps a sentence like "Although I may never have time to learn everything I'd like, I look forward to expanding my quest for knowledge as I continue my education."
Best of luck in your studies!
Thanks,
Sarah, EssayForum.com
