The characters in those stories are idealized and represent ideas common to us. Little red riding hood is the epitome of moral goodness, the wicked witch in Hansel and Gretel represents pure evil.
(Combine these two sentences like this -->The characters in those stories are idealized and represent ideas common to us: Little Red Riding Hood is the epitome of moral goodness, the wicked witch in Hansel and Gretel represents pure evil.) We need thosecharacters since in reality people have always two sides to their personality.
(I'm not quite sure how that last sentences ties in to the message you're trying to convey) However, sometimes a person
(no comma) who seems to come out of a different world
, comes along
and influence
s our lives forever.
...However, then something happened
that religiously inclined people would call a wonder.
...Equipped with torn clothes, a wild beard
, and crutches
, a homeless man came in who seemed as though he had slept a week under a bridge.
"You know, this is exactly what some cops told me when I was driving with an electronic wheelchair down the road. "You smell very much like alcohol, sir". Then I:"I am an alcoholic. I always smell like alcohol". The cops:"Are you drunk right now?" "Again I am an alcoholic. I am always drunk".
"But you cannot drive like this on the road!" "What are you gonna do? Take away my wheelchair?"
"OK, but be cautious." "Of course I am cautious you idiots, these are my bones."
^^ When having dialogue within a quotation, use a single apostrophe instead of double quotations. Does that make sense? So like: "You know, this is exactly what some cops told me when I was driving with an electronic wheelchair down the road.
' You smell very much like alcohol, sir.
' etc etc.
He instilled in me fascination with the power of mind, which made him perfectly happy despite disability and homelessness and which afterwards enabled me to not let asthma and skin disease affect my mental happiness. More importantly, this man fascinated by being simply himself which showed me that inside of every person is something uniquely beautiful worth searching for.
^^ These are really good sentences with very nice underlying themes, but the phrasing is a little awkward. Also, I think you should make a separate sentence for how his mindset has helped you overcome your asthma and skin disease.
Overall, I enjoyed reading your essay and you did a good job; you kept things interesting. I thought you did a great job tying in your interests in psychology and acting, and your concluding paragraphs were well written and meaningful. However, I think that you should actually spend a little less time describing other people you met and generalities about your job, and instead spend more time developing how this homeless man influenced you because you've definitely got some great things going for you in this essay! Nice work and good luck with everything!