I strongly believe that the Honors Program at The George Washington University is one of the best academic programs in this nation where there are plentiful resources and excellent professional fields of research.
try to make this a more personal essay.
whole-heartedly want to be a member of the University Honors Program because it is a perfect mutually beneficial relationship in which the Program and I will benefit from what we have to offer each other.
what do you have to offer? I don't see anything here in this essay
The Honors program is a perfect fit for me as I go on to pursue a career in the medical field. The tough, challenging courses it provides will add to my drive to excel and succeed. Focus more on this idea throughout the essay.
good you talk about yourself at the end, but it's unexpected and breaks the flow of the previous two paragraphs. try moving things around.
I ask what I can do for the Program
itself. <what do you mean itself?>
you do show interest in joining. however, try making it more personal and focus more on what you have to give instead of a big "suck-up" answer in your intro. place that at the end.