'A hope for a wonderful learning experience' - college entrance essay (UCF)?

This is one of my questions from my online applications for UCF:

I chose University of Central Florida because it is a university which grants young adults with goals, higher education, and

also opportunities to become
successful in life. UCF is a university with a great community and a place which one can seek great education.

The University of Central Florida is well known for its outstanding system of education and many programs to pick from which

are highly ranked.

The University of Central Florida is a university that is always expanding its growth and trying to be come more advanced and

challenging for its increasing student body. Another pertinent thing about the University of Central Florida is that the

staff deeply cares for its students, characteristic through their persistent and constant up scaling of the school, this has

highly influenced me. University of Central Florida is a place of opportunities which concludes to my decision of applying

your for such a wonderful University..

I chose to apply to the University of Central Florida because I believe it is more than just an average school, I'm applying

for UCF because it become my home for the next 4 years and the mixture of its culture and its relaxed atmosphere of your

University is something I would be most elated to associate myself with.

UCF has always been my favorite during time in Florida. This university offers me many different opportunities and resources

to take the road of success which other universities could never offer. university of Central Florida is able to offer me and

other students the spectacular experiences and job opportunities necessary to help us become very successful in life. Your

University has a strong partnership with corporations and companies in Orlando which increases the growth of job

opportunities for all students.

If I had the chance to attend UCF it would be a wonderful learning experience. Your school offers me all the challenges and

opportunities that colleges offer to their students. University of Central Florida is my first choice of Universities and I

hope that I am able to attend your University this Fall.

currently I need ideas for the following questions:

1. If there has been some obstacle or "bump in the road," in your academic or personal life, please explain the circumstances.

Another pertinent thing about the University of Central Florida is that the

staff deeply cares for its students, characteristic through their persistent and constant up scaling of the school, this has

highly influenced meimpressed on me/ influenced on me . University of Central Florida is a place of opportunities which concludes to my decision of applying

your for such a wonderful University.. [/quote]

come on friend,

Hi, im not really good at writting essays, but i thought of this:
I chose to apply to the University of Central Florida because I believe it is more than just an average school.[I think its better to write "I know it is more than just an average school].

This seems like it's going well, it helped my essay aswell haha.

As Kevin said, be more specific. At the moment, you could use the same essay for any application by just changing the name and location of the university to match another. Add in specific resources, programs, course, professors, aspects of the campus, anything that would show that UCF means more to you than any other college you might get in to.

Hey, good call, Stephan! I agree. A good applicant is resolute and single-minded. Certain.

Is the prompt something like "Why do you want to attend UCF?", because the college really doesn't need to know it's good. Even that's not a very good reason for wanting to attend a college. If you're attending a college merely for their prestige then clearly you have not researched well!

As Sean said, this is very very general. You never dip into anything. When I read this essay all I end up knowing about UCF is that it's a college and that it's near Orlando.

Try to draft an outline by using question and answer form. Here's the example:

Why am i choose to attend UCF?
- High reputation of the school
- Well-known in certain course
- Great location
- Many benefits provided to students- scholarships, facilities

Thanks