Early in my college career I began working at Harvard Medical School. Though the position I held did not entail any clinical work, mere exposure to the environment of the medical field sparked my interest. After expressing an interest in medicine to my supervisor, she was able to connect me to Dr. _____, an Assistant Professor of ______ at Harvard Medical School, who also conducts research at Beth Israel Deaconess Medical Center. Shortly afterwards, I started my internship in Dr. _____'s maternal medicine research lab. My responsibilities in this lab range from organization of patient records and consent forms, to helping with sample collection and analysis of placenta. Dr. _____'s research protocol focuses on cardiovascular effects on women with preeclampsia (hypertension during pregnancy). Dr. _____ also sees patients in a clinical setting, for which she has allowed me to shadow her. I have thoroughly enjoyed the opportunity to work in a hospital setting; it has been both fascinating and gratifying. This experience has been very valuable, and it has affirmed my interest in pursuing the sciences.
I'm a transfer student if you couldn't tell
I feel like this is too boring? I might go for a total rewrite that is more descriptive and interesting. any input would help
What is your prompt? Just describe one activity, or many in general? You don't need to say what the Dr. does, just what YOU do for her.
It is a bit bland, but desk work normally is. Perhaps use some imagery words? Compare your experience with the growth of a flower/plant/thing?
As I stepped into the doctor's office I was filled with anxiety, yet completely eager. All throughout my life I have had a paralyzing fear of needles, but on this day I was actually enthused to be getting multiple injections. I would not be getting a flu vaccination, or anything of that nature; I was getting my immunizations in order to begin my internship at Beth Israel Deaconess Medical Center. During the fall semester of my sophomore year, I started working in a maternal medicine research lab under the supervision of Dr. ----, an Assistant Professor of Obstetrics and Gynecology at Harvard Medical School. My responsibilities in this lab ranged from organization of patient records and consent forms, to helping with sample collection and analysis of placenta. Aside from research, Dr.--- has also allowed me to shadow her while seeing patients in a clinical setting. Every week when I step foot in the hospital, I love it. I am fascinated by the research conducted in the laboratory setting, and I look forward to one day being able to manage independent research projects of my own. I find Dr. ----, as well as many other physicians that I have met, to be brilliant and inspiring. I strive to someday be as great of a physician as she is.
rewrite, is this more interesting?
