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My imagination ; COMMON APP - Extracurricular or Work experiences


kabal 9 / 61  
Feb 4, 2013   #1
This is all i could think about. this be harsh
Is this want they want.
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum).

From the super bowl adverts to the series and movies on TV to politicians trying to convince me that their views are right the other guy is wrong, our currently society is mostly simulated by images. I find this means of interaction tiresome. Although people learn visually, I see myself different. When I read novels, I, and most of us, just see words. Right! That's the point. The words written by the author is not trying to convince me or stimulate me in any way, but the words help me think of the way I, myself, would interpret those words. I love reading novels; my imagination is endless. After reading a novel, I begin to think of different scenarios that could have happened to a character. I feel like I have lived many life times through the characters of the novels I read. My imagination as not only given me the ability to think of likely solutions to any math problem, but it has also helped me think of possible solutions to the problems I encounter every day.
android21 10 / 56 20  
Feb 4, 2013   #2
My imagination as (has) not only given me the ability to think of likely (lets be more direct) solutions to any math problem, but it has also helped me think of possible solutions to the problems (challenges?) I encounter every day.

First, let me thank you for helping me choose one of my three essays...I chose none lol...I am gonna scrap it and re write it.

As for yours, its direct and does not bore admissions with a bunch of BS. Hopefully, the corrections helped clear up your message.... For what college may I ask?
jorgearmando18 8 / 32 9  
Feb 5, 2013   #3
From the super bowl adverts to the series and movies on TV to politicians trying to convince
Do you want to link these 3 ideas? or yo missed that you did? I just need to know if this is intentional because it may not be clear.

trying to convince me that their views are right the other guy is wrong.

what do you mean with their views? their point of view? perhaps?
and the other guy? which guy?

our currently society is mostly simulated by images.

Current. and simulated by images? what do you mean with that?

The words written by the author is not. ARE

but the words help me think of the way I, myself .
Is like saying me and I

Overall, I believe that with these corrections you can make a little bit stronger paragraph
My advice? Don't let the fact that is just a paragraph influence you to make a simple one, make every word, the strongest that you've ever wrote.

Very best of luck
dumi 1 / 6,927 1592  
Feb 5, 2013   #4
Please briefly elaborate on one of your extracurricular activities or work experiences in the space below (1000 character maximum

Well... I am wondering whether your answer falls within this classification :( .... You are supposed to write about extracurricular activities or work experiences. However, your answer talks of something more towards a hobby. You talk about you power of imagination. So how does that become an extracurricular activity? If you can set up a link between the two, that's fine. Otherwise, in my view, your answer may sound out of topic. Give some thoughts to this point!
OP kabal 9 / 61  
Feb 5, 2013   #5
I and most of my friend come together, almost every month, and try to explore each character.Much like a book club. Does this count as an extra curriculum activity for me to link to this short essay.


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