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independence- i wish i were there. stanford: a historical event i wish i'd witnessed



Ro4 9 / 21  
Dec 6, 2013   #1
On the 6th of March 1957, a nation was born in Africa. Ghana formally known as Gold Coast was that nation. The first in Africa to be liberated from colonial rule and allowed to govern herself. A beacon of hope for all other African nations. Looking at pictures and videos from the past, I sense the immense joy of my people. Their joy was so complete; their hope so infectious. I wish I were there when it happened. I wish I were there to hear Dr. Nkrumah's speech, to drink in the joy and hope of my people.

dumi 1 / 6793  
Dec 6, 2013   #2
This is very well written. A few suggestions from me;

On the 6th of March 1957, a new nation was born in Africa.

Ghana, formally known as Gold Coast was that nation.

A beacon of hope for all other African nations

She was beacon of hope from all other African nations.

I wish I were there to hear Dr. Nkrumah's speech, to drink in the joy and hope of my people.

I wish I were there to hear Dr, Nkrumah's landmark speech to immerse in joy and hope of my people.


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