My inquisitive personality and passion for building fits ideally in Purdue

Purdue Supplement Essay - Why Purdue?

Prompt: How will opportunities at Purdue support your interests both in and out of the classroom? (Respond in 100 words or fewer)

My inquisitive personality and passion for building fits ideally in Purdue. I can definitely see myself in Zucrow Labs blasting liquid methane rockets. Also, many clubs, namely SAE related clubs, such as Purdue Baja Racing and Formula SAE, thrill me. Being an individual who spent most of my teenage years building and modifying RC trucks, I can't imagine what would it be like to build and test a life-sized version. Not only it will enhance my skills, but also it will enable me to meet new people who share similar interests.

I feel like I need to talk more about my interest inside the classroom. I was thinking of adding a sentence after this first sentence, but i don't know how to do that.

Feraas, you can explain something about the unique learning experience at Purdue. Maybe discuss a class that relates directly to machine building or design where you look forward to building usable 3D engine models or something of the sort. That would tie in directly with your interest in experimenting at Zucrow Labs. Try to add another sentence to Zucrow Labs by discussing something definite that you hope to achieve while spending your time there. Something you would like to learn about during your non-class hours. Don't just say that the school clubs thrill you. That doesn't mean anything. You are being asked about how that club will support an academic or non-academic interest so you need to mention something specific about the club that you hope can increase your skills or existing interest in a specific function of a pit crew / racing team. So far, you have a decent draft that can be further developed. Hopefully you will be able to figure out how to apply these edits to your existing essay.

Thank you very much for your feedback! I'll try harder to come up with a better one.