Intellectually Exciting - Kaleidoscopes

Prompt: Describe an experience that you have had or a concept you have learned about that intellectually excites you. When answering this question, you may want to consider some of the following questions: Why does this topic excite you? How does it impact the way you or others experience the world? What questions do you continue to ponder about it?

Please give me some good feedback on how to improve this essay. Correct grammatical errors as well please.

Open a toy chest and it will reveal a myriad of trinkets. Simple in their construction, each of these toys is surprisingly complex. With the ability to entertain a child for hours on end, these apparatuses have an incredible power that is taken for granted. Even with such capabilities, toys are seen as childish and puerile.

Always infatuated with the idea that something so simple can be so amusing, I have a long history of exploring these creations. However, it wasn't until recently that I uncovered a different side of these toys. While playing with a simple kaleidoscope, I unearthed a ground breaking truth. Meant to engross children, a kaleidoscope is a small tube that contains two mirrors that show incredible patterns as the tube is rotated. When translated directly from its Greek roots, kaleidoscope means a scope for viewing beautiful forms. Majestic forms is exactly what can be seen through the lens, however, there is a deeper truth. Within the layers of mirrors, I found reality. Looking through the kaleidoscope at the complex patterns, I realized that this provided an accurate view at life. Unlike the kaleidoscope itself, life is not straight forward. It is however, intricate like the patterns that are seen through the instrument. Convoluted and multifaceted, that is what life truly is and I was baffled when the kaleidoscope showed it to be that way.

Mystified by the sophisticated truth that such a child-like tool had to offer, I felt a new urgency to continue to examine the unseen side of these toys. Never would I have thought that a toy could convey actuality but I was dazzled by what the kaleidoscope had to offer. It opened to eyes to see a world that has many simplistic things that bear an incredible deeper meaning. I want to encourage others to explore as I did and uncover unknown truths. If people learn to broaden their horizons and delve into the such curious subjects, maybe they will learnt to admire the minute wonders that surround us.

Never would I have thought that a toy could convey actuality but I was dazzled by what the kaleidoscope had to offer. Try to reword this differently it doesnt make that much sense 'convey actuality'?

I loved the topic though, It was great kaleidoscopes are cool and this topic is really unique!
good job

When you get to this part, I think you are not doing a good job of introducing the main idea. In a short essay like this it is important to introduce the main idea early so that you can make your point...

So maybe one sentence should be added to the end of that first paragraph.

Meant to engross children, a kaleidoscope is a small tube that contains two mirrors that show incredible patterns as the tube is rotated. --- its not necessary to tell what one is. Use this sentence to tell something the reader might not know about it or some intriguing observation that you have made.

If people learn to broaden their horizons and delve into the such curious subjects, maybe they will learnt to admire the minute wonders that surround us.---- you should write learn instead of learnt.

This is a nice theme. I think you should introduce it at the end of the first paragraph.