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What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement.
Ever since I could remember during elementary school people would ask me "What do you want to be when you grow up?". As a kid I didn't know what I wanted to be, it seemed that every time someone asked me that question I always had a different answer. My responses would go from a teacher, to a doctor, to a fashion model and even an astronaut. In the end, I never had a choice that I would stick to because I wanted to do everything and anything that seemed interesting. However, I always did have a passion for math.
Throughout elementary and middle school I was for the most part, good with math. In elementary school I would receive good grades on my math tests and in middle school I was enrolled in honors math every year. I never paid much attention to how great of an achievement it was to understand math and how it would affect me in the long run. As high school began I took geometry, algebra II, numerical analysis and AP Calculus AB. I received A's and B's in each one of these classes and surprisingly I enjoyed the time I spent learning math, doing math homework and receiving good grades on my tests. Then, college came along and for every UC and CSU I applied for I put my major down as aerospace engineering; a major that is impacted in about every single campus I applied too. Sadly enough, I didn't get accepted to any of the UCs and CSUs that I had really hoped to go to. Once I had to make my decision on a campus I choose Cal Poly Pomona so that I could transfer to aerospace engineering once I had all of the requirements to change my major. Yet, that all came to a halt once I realized what I wanted to major in; what I had a passion for.
I choose to be Mathematics major at Cal Poly Pomona and when I started to think about what I could do with my major, I started to realize that this is what I wanted to keep as my major. Math has continuously been interesting to me because you learn how deal with numbers in countless of ways in order to reach your answer. Math is like a language, you can't understand it fully without a good foundation in the subject. As a result, I want to help other students with the subject by becoming a teacher in the subject. I have had plenty of experience helping others whether its friends, family or even classmates with understanding math. I also have had my own experience of asking for help on math, so I know what they might be going through. I want to be that person that helps them get back on the road to success. After I finish helping others with math I end up having a huge feeling of accomplishment because once you understand how to do a math problem and get the answer right, you feel like you're on top of the world. To see their faces light up as they get the answer right is such a remarkable sight. Moreover, in my job I also have to deal with situations where being a math major comes in handy. For my job we have to set up rooms for groups that will be holding events and sometimes we have to calculate how many rows of chairs we will have to take out or how many we will have to put in. My coworkers always count on me to do the calculations quickly for they know I am good at math. It's a great feeling knowing that other people recognize what you're good at and appreciate what you can help them with. I still have yet to do an internship because most internships that I have wanted to apply for require a higher level of math, but by the end of this academic year I will without a doubt be applying for more than one internship. Math is such a versatile subject that I could get involved in about any career I want, but to get involved with students whom I know what they are struggling with, that's an experience that I want to be a part of.
What is your intended major? Discuss how your interest in the subject developed and describe any experience you have had in the field - such as volunteer work, internships and employment, participation in student organizations and activities - and what you have gained from your involvement.
Ever since I could remember during elementary school people would ask me "What do you want to be when you grow up?". As a kid I didn't know what I wanted to be, it seemed that every time someone asked me that question I always had a different answer. My responses would go from a teacher, to a doctor, to a fashion model and even an astronaut. In the end, I never had a choice that I would stick to because I wanted to do everything and anything that seemed interesting. However, I always did have a passion for math.
Throughout elementary and middle school I was for the most part, good with math. In elementary school I would receive good grades on my math tests and in middle school I was enrolled in honors math every year. I never paid much attention to how great of an achievement it was to understand math and how it would affect me in the long run. As high school began I took geometry, algebra II, numerical analysis and AP Calculus AB. I received A's and B's in each one of these classes and surprisingly I enjoyed the time I spent learning math, doing math homework and receiving good grades on my tests. Then, college came along and for every UC and CSU I applied for I put my major down as aerospace engineering; a major that is impacted in about every single campus I applied too. Sadly enough, I didn't get accepted to any of the UCs and CSUs that I had really hoped to go to. Once I had to make my decision on a campus I choose Cal Poly Pomona so that I could transfer to aerospace engineering once I had all of the requirements to change my major. Yet, that all came to a halt once I realized what I wanted to major in; what I had a passion for.
I choose to be Mathematics major at Cal Poly Pomona and when I started to think about what I could do with my major, I started to realize that this is what I wanted to keep as my major. Math has continuously been interesting to me because you learn how deal with numbers in countless of ways in order to reach your answer. Math is like a language, you can't understand it fully without a good foundation in the subject. As a result, I want to help other students with the subject by becoming a teacher in the subject. I have had plenty of experience helping others whether its friends, family or even classmates with understanding math. I also have had my own experience of asking for help on math, so I know what they might be going through. I want to be that person that helps them get back on the road to success. After I finish helping others with math I end up having a huge feeling of accomplishment because once you understand how to do a math problem and get the answer right, you feel like you're on top of the world. To see their faces light up as they get the answer right is such a remarkable sight. Moreover, in my job I also have to deal with situations where being a math major comes in handy. For my job we have to set up rooms for groups that will be holding events and sometimes we have to calculate how many rows of chairs we will have to take out or how many we will have to put in. My coworkers always count on me to do the calculations quickly for they know I am good at math. It's a great feeling knowing that other people recognize what you're good at and appreciate what you can help them with. I still have yet to do an internship because most internships that I have wanted to apply for require a higher level of math, but by the end of this academic year I will without a doubt be applying for more than one internship. Math is such a versatile subject that I could get involved in about any career I want, but to get involved with students whom I know what they are struggling with, that's an experience that I want to be a part of.
