ABC University: Besides its appealing location, top-notch research facilities, familial community & praiseworthy extracurricular idiosyncrasies, I was awed by the availability of myriad opportunities - both academic and supplementary- in/out of the classroom for me. The celebration of Nepalese fiestas all in one beautiful day, stretching into the wee hours of the night, could not only substantiate my altruistic ambassadorship to ABC on behalf of my country, but also acquaint others with the sacred Nepalese Hindu way of life. By engaging in eclectic mix of student consortium- particularly South Asian Students Association and ABC Photography Club- I would nourish their heterogeneity via portrayal of my own ethnic cultures & skills as well as advertise multi-national art and traditions for maintenance of 'Unity among Diversity'. An exotic symphony of Nepalese musicals would reverberate along with other stereotypical melodies in ABC Spirit Band during several auspicious ceremonies with my assistance.
Apart from being a patron for diversification of ABC community, I could also serve as a valuable asset for the ABC athletics in multiple sports as I have stood out as a dexterous athlete throughout my sporting journey; what's more, with utmost dedication and labor, I will endeavor to elevate team-spirit, sportsmanship, and commitment amidst my teammates accompanied with their self-gratification and extension of athletic capabilities. Moreover, all of my humanitarian and catholic intentions, that I've been exercising throughout my student life, will continue flawlessly in several activist and political coalitions inside ABC with aggrandization of cross-cultural debates dealing with contemporary global issues.
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4783 Sushant, you only have a limited 250 word count for this essay. I do not want you to waste is by again describing what you like about the school or repeating information that you already explained in great detail regarding the festival of lights in a previous essay. Always aim to present new information to the reviewer with every prompt that you respond to. So think of other ways that you can enrich the community.
Focus more of your first paragraph on what you hope to contribute to the Asian student organization and the photography club. What unique abilities do you have which will help to enhance the experience of being a member in those clubs? It would be better if you can inform the reviewer of any awards that you won in photography. Otherwise, speak of your expertise in photography enhancement using software and the like.
When you mention an interest in sports, be more specific. Pick a varsity team to join and explain why you wish to join that team. Sometimes, a keen interest in sports helps to get you admitted to a school. So find out which notable teams the university has and opt to choose one to join. Don't forget to mention what places you finished in with regards to the previous competitions you joined. That would help in considering your application based upon your sports prowess if any. So be truthful in everything that you say.
