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"Inventories can be managed, but people must be led." Essay on Leadership



masktaz 6 / 15  
Feb 16, 2015   #1
May be my ideas aren't well organized. What should I change or elaborate on this? I am highly appreciate your criticisms and feedback. Leave you essay and I will gladly give my feedback in return

What is the definition of a leader to you?(2000 character max)


"Inventories can be managed, but people must be led." H. Ross Perot

A leader is a person who has a vision, a drive, and a commitment to achieve that vision, and the skills to make it happen. Having a leadership is one of the most essential characteristic that a person can have. It is not only a matter of instructing people or having a certain level position. Leaders act base on their personalities, beliefs, experiences, and capabilities. They may be born, created, or raise to the occasion. Nevertheless, these capabilities can be obtained by training the potential future leaders, nurturing them, and allowing them to lead.

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Vns9x 102 / 230  
Feb 17, 2015   #2
This second paragraph contains 2 ideas. It would have a better outlook if you divided them into 2 paragraphs.

Your essay will sound sturdier if you put the quote of H. Ross Perot in your conclusion!
TJLuschen - / 236  
Feb 18, 2015   #3
Hi, I agree with Vns9x's comments. Here are some other comments:

"Inventories can be managed, but people must be led." H. Ross Perot

A leader is a person who has a vision, a drive, and a commitment to achieve that vision, [along with] and {the two "and"s sounded a bit odd} the skills to make it happen. Havinga leadership is one of the most essential characteristic[s ] that a person can have. It is not only a matter of instructing people or having a certain level position. {a transition would be good here - I think this is connected with your previous sentence, but a good transition would make that clear} Leaders act base[d ] on their personalities, beliefs, experiences, and capabilities. They may be born, created, or raise [rise] to the occasion. Nevertheless, these capabilities can be obtained by training the potential future leaders, nurturing them, and allowing them to lead.

I {I would add "always" here} try to develop my leadership [capability], as I believe that there are several fundamental skills [that] need to be implemented in becoming of [to become] an effective leader. The first skill is a leader who has integrity.{this is not really a skill though - it is more of a quality} Integrity m[eans] leaders will gain [the] trust of employees by having a compelling vision and do[ing] the right things [in accordance] to do appropriate with the [highest] values and principles. The second is [being able to inspire one's followers] an inspiring leader. Only having [the] trust of [ones] employees or followers is insufficient. A leader has to be able to extend their trust [to] become a movement in achieving their vision. It can be done by mean of inspiring. The third one{ I would not use "one" here - it has been a long time since your topic sentence and I actually have forgotten what "one" refers to here :) maybe restate it} is [being] a motivator. {see, motivator, inspiring leader, and a leader who has integrity are not skills, they are people who have the skills} A leader has a vision. Leaders see a problem that needs to be fixed or a goal that need[s ] to be achieved. By inspiring [others] will influence them to pursue the goals but the motivation will generate the passion and keep them engage[d ] with that vision when the initial enthusiasm fades. This motivation also helps the leaders empowerring their follower[s ], so that the team feel[s a] part of {a part of what? you need a noun here} and buy into the vision.

To sum all the ideas up, with all the skills offered above, I can hardly agree that the great leaders are not only achieving their vision but also will generate more leaders rather than more followers. {this last phrase is unclear to me - also, if you are saying that leaders must be able to nurture other leaders, that is a new reason and should not really be included in the conclusion} In the highly competitive and highly volatile world we live in, those with great leaders will do great things. Those with ineffective leaders will flounder.


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