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Johns Hopkins offers 50 majors across the schools of Arts and Sciences and Engineering. On this supplement, we ask you to identify one or two that you might like to pursue here. Why did you choose the way you did? If you are undecided, why didn't you choose? (If any past courses or academic experiences influenced your decision, you may include them in your essay.)
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I want to learn about biology and engineering. Bioengineering is my first choice.
The image of the telephone is still fresh in my mind and the voice of my friend still vivid. The phone rang. I picked it up. It was my best friend: "My mother is dead." Seven years ago, my best friend's mother died of cancer. At that time, I was still young. I couldn't contemplate the difficulties that were set ahead of my friend and I am sure he didn't know either. His father promised to take care of him. But after two years he re-married and left his son to the government. The childhood of my friend was, suddenly, ruined.
I often look back at this incident and ask my self, "How did this happen?" The answer is simple: medicine. I can't guarantee that the actions of the father would have been different, but I know things would have worked out differently if medical advancement were at a point that could save cancer. It's amazing how something such as an overproduction of cells could change lives. And it irritates me how cancer, seven years ago and today, does not have a cure.
I recognize the problems of the world and I am very optimistic in approaching them. I can't solve all the problems but I can do my best and solve as many as I can. I want to contribute to society and help reduce the number of diseases that cannot be cured as of date. I want to be a doctor to help the people; the people I can save and the family members I can prevent from suffering. I see medicine as a path of contentment because it fulfills my desires.
The world is an interesting place. Problems spawn from people who inhabit it and challenges arise and wait to be overcome. One of these challenges is cancer and, likewise, the problems that revolve around it. Seven years ago, my friend's mother could not be saved. But who knows how many cancer patients can be saved seven years in the future: I want to contribute to this number. Recently, I am enthralled to find that medicine research has shed new light on the activation of a key protein in cancer development: I want to contribute to this research. Seven years later, I want to save every cancer patient (an ambitious dream, but that's what dreams are for)!
I know the path to medicine and I am fully aware of the difficulties. Piece by piece, I have grasp the true essence of who I want to become. I know I can look back at the sufferings of my friend and use his pain as the motivator in my pursuit to become a doctor: more importantly, I will use it to remind myself why I've chosen this path - there are people waiting to be saved. As I embark on my journey, Johns Hopkins' Biomedical Engineering Program will be my first step.
Please be harsh if necessary. Any feedback will be appreciated. Post your essay I'll edit too.
Thank you for your help.
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Johns Hopkins offers 50 majors across the schools of Arts and Sciences and Engineering. On this supplement, we ask you to identify one or two that you might like to pursue here. Why did you choose the way you did? If you are undecided, why didn't you choose? (If any past courses or academic experiences influenced your decision, you may include them in your essay.)
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I want to learn about biology and engineering. Bioengineering is my first choice.
The image of the telephone is still fresh in my mind and the voice of my friend still vivid. The phone rang. I picked it up. It was my best friend: "My mother is dead." Seven years ago, my best friend's mother died of cancer. At that time, I was still young. I couldn't contemplate the difficulties that were set ahead of my friend and I am sure he didn't know either. His father promised to take care of him. But after two years he re-married and left his son to the government. The childhood of my friend was, suddenly, ruined.
I often look back at this incident and ask my self, "How did this happen?" The answer is simple: medicine. I can't guarantee that the actions of the father would have been different, but I know things would have worked out differently if medical advancement were at a point that could save cancer. It's amazing how something such as an overproduction of cells could change lives. And it irritates me how cancer, seven years ago and today, does not have a cure.
I recognize the problems of the world and I am very optimistic in approaching them. I can't solve all the problems but I can do my best and solve as many as I can. I want to contribute to society and help reduce the number of diseases that cannot be cured as of date. I want to be a doctor to help the people; the people I can save and the family members I can prevent from suffering. I see medicine as a path of contentment because it fulfills my desires.
The world is an interesting place. Problems spawn from people who inhabit it and challenges arise and wait to be overcome. One of these challenges is cancer and, likewise, the problems that revolve around it. Seven years ago, my friend's mother could not be saved. But who knows how many cancer patients can be saved seven years in the future: I want to contribute to this number. Recently, I am enthralled to find that medicine research has shed new light on the activation of a key protein in cancer development: I want to contribute to this research. Seven years later, I want to save every cancer patient (an ambitious dream, but that's what dreams are for)!
I know the path to medicine and I am fully aware of the difficulties. Piece by piece, I have grasp the true essence of who I want to become. I know I can look back at the sufferings of my friend and use his pain as the motivator in my pursuit to become a doctor: more importantly, I will use it to remind myself why I've chosen this path - there are people waiting to be saved. As I embark on my journey, Johns Hopkins' Biomedical Engineering Program will be my first step.