This is my response to Stanford's second prompt: Virtually all of Stanford's undergraduates live on campus. Write a note to your future roommate that reveals something about you or that will help your roommate - and us - know you better. 2000 Characters available, at least 250 words.
Please give me some feedback! Anything I can change to improve it? I'm a little over the limit with characters. I have 2,939 (with spaces). Also, for any writing responses with character limits, are spaces always counted? Thanks so much!
Dear Roomie,
I'm looking forward to meeting you! I have two brothers back home but always had my own room because I'm the only girl. Making this our little home should be fun though! However, I suppose you want to know a thing or two about this stranger you'll be living with, just to tranquilize some typical freshman anxieties.
First things first, my name is Melissa Jue and you can rest assured that I'm not a rapist or killer or any of those characters on Criminal Minds. Therefore, there's no need for background checks, even if you do catch me watching movies like "The Crazies" or chuckling quietly on the computer in the middle of the night- I'll probably just be on YouTube or engaged in some novel. In all honesty, I'm less of a maniac and more of a Mellow Melly, except in those times when I boil over with the energy of a child on a sugar rush at an amusement park with balloon bouquets everywhere. If you love to socialize and have insightful or even pointless conversations at ungodly hours, then my outgoing, owl nature will benefit us both. However, if garrulous vampires annoy you, then you don't need to panic either because I'll usually be studying or doing homework. I've always been a bookworm that unfortunately can only feed independently in silence. That may be our only problem.
Otherwise, nearly everyone likes music and music will always be my soul mate. On top of that, I'm eclectic so I'm sure we'll agree on at least one genre. If you fancy karaoke, let's do a duet. Want to relax to soothing piano compositions? I'll make the keyboard sing. Have you ever wanted a portrait of yourself? I can be your artist, although I can't guarantee an absolute likeness. But if there's anything I'm up for at any time, it's adventure. Whenever you want to explore, I'm your Dora, only I don't fluently speak Spanish or talk to inanimate objects-in front of people, anyway.
I may also be one of the weirder nerds you'll have met in your lifetime. I've been lugging around a turtle shell housing papers and books since elementary and thus carry it now as if it weighed a measly two pounds. But don't let that intimidate you. In addition, I've more allergies than most people and I'm a failure at video games. At the same time, I headbang to some death metal, am a cross country runner, and love outdoor activities.
Thus, there's no need to worry, friend. We're bound to stand on some common ground. I don't play Judge Judy and I can be your Doctor Phil-lis. If you have a situation, I'll help you out and it'd be wonderful if you'd do the same for me. I hope you're as excited as I am. See you soon!
P.S. If I look dead one morning in the chair with mouth open wide and white, zombie eyes, relax. That's just how I sleep. You may also have the urge to dial 911 because your roommate is having an asthma attack. Calm down, I'm not. I'm just laughing, extending rather than shortening my life.
Please give me some feedback! Anything I can change to improve it? I'm a little over the limit with characters. I have 2,939 (with spaces). Also, for any writing responses with character limits, are spaces always counted? Thanks so much!
Dear Roomie,
I'm looking forward to meeting you! I have two brothers back home but always had my own room because I'm the only girl. Making this our little home should be fun though! However, I suppose you want to know a thing or two about this stranger you'll be living with, just to tranquilize some typical freshman anxieties.
First things first, my name is Melissa Jue and you can rest assured that I'm not a rapist or killer or any of those characters on Criminal Minds. Therefore, there's no need for background checks, even if you do catch me watching movies like "The Crazies" or chuckling quietly on the computer in the middle of the night- I'll probably just be on YouTube or engaged in some novel. In all honesty, I'm less of a maniac and more of a Mellow Melly, except in those times when I boil over with the energy of a child on a sugar rush at an amusement park with balloon bouquets everywhere. If you love to socialize and have insightful or even pointless conversations at ungodly hours, then my outgoing, owl nature will benefit us both. However, if garrulous vampires annoy you, then you don't need to panic either because I'll usually be studying or doing homework. I've always been a bookworm that unfortunately can only feed independently in silence. That may be our only problem.
Otherwise, nearly everyone likes music and music will always be my soul mate. On top of that, I'm eclectic so I'm sure we'll agree on at least one genre. If you fancy karaoke, let's do a duet. Want to relax to soothing piano compositions? I'll make the keyboard sing. Have you ever wanted a portrait of yourself? I can be your artist, although I can't guarantee an absolute likeness. But if there's anything I'm up for at any time, it's adventure. Whenever you want to explore, I'm your Dora, only I don't fluently speak Spanish or talk to inanimate objects-in front of people, anyway.
I may also be one of the weirder nerds you'll have met in your lifetime. I've been lugging around a turtle shell housing papers and books since elementary and thus carry it now as if it weighed a measly two pounds. But don't let that intimidate you. In addition, I've more allergies than most people and I'm a failure at video games. At the same time, I headbang to some death metal, am a cross country runner, and love outdoor activities.
Thus, there's no need to worry, friend. We're bound to stand on some common ground. I don't play Judge Judy and I can be your Doctor Phil-lis. If you have a situation, I'll help you out and it'd be wonderful if you'd do the same for me. I hope you're as excited as I am. See you soon!
P.S. If I look dead one morning in the chair with mouth open wide and white, zombie eyes, relax. That's just how I sleep. You may also have the urge to dial 911 because your roommate is having an asthma attack. Calm down, I'm not. I'm just laughing, extending rather than shortening my life.
