The job of an engineer is involved in all aspects of our lives, from the roads we drive on to the food we eat. Engineers are tasked with solving the world's most challenging problems. A successful engineer has a passion for understanding how the universe operates, which is complimented by the natural aptitude for math and science. The various disciplines of engineering allow many opportunities to contribute directly and indirectly to society through life-changing innovations or technological marvels. For these reasons I feel that a career in engineering could be one of the most rewarding jobs in the world for me.
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Any and all help is greatly appreciated. I understand the task at hand but am having difficulty putting into words my feelings on the matter.
As I progress through high school, it is clear that my science and math classes are the most interesting. Math and science are my favorite classes.
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I like your specific examples such as the seawater desalination and your father's work at Ansys. However, I think you need to elaborate more on these real-life examples and experiences instead of writing about your love for CMU and science/math, as these examples will set you apart from the crowd.
Carnegie Mellon University is the ideal environment for me to continue my studies. As a Pittsburgh resident I have been aware of CMU (stay on the safe side, use the full name all the time.) and its reputation for several years. The legacy of CMU graduates runs in my extended family; my cousins, Patrick Russell and Dr. William Bolosky, along with my uncle, M.William Miller, are successful alumni of CMU with degrees in varying schools of learning. They have shared their positive views and experiences of their time spent at CMU. My interest for the engineering sciences has grown over many years, and I realize that CMU will be the start of a new life experience and a continuum for my appreciation of math and science. My academic interests, combined with a well-grounded understanding of what engineers actually do, make me certain that the Carnegie Institute of Technology at CMU is the next step for me.
An engineer is involved in all aspects of our lives, from the roads we drive on to the food we eat. The various disciplines of engineering afford many opportunities to contribute directly and indirectly to society through life-changing innovations or technological advances. A successful engineer not only has a passion for understanding how the universe operates, but is blessed with a natural aptitude for math and science. Engineers are tasked with solving the world's most challenging problems, and in the future I believe that chemistry will be especially important to engineering. In a science and technology journal I recently learned how engineers are now using small, nonpolar, smooth carbon nanotubes in seawater desalination, which are more efficient than polymer-based, semi-permeable membranes. Furthermore, with the rising concern for alternative, renewable energy sources, there is a necessity for chemical engineers to design the energy systems that consumers worldwide will use every day. These examples illustrate how the need for a strong background in chemistry to solve current and future problems is critical. I want to become a chemical engineer so that I can solve these kinds of problems and other similar ones that interest me.
My first exposure to real-world engineering was through my father who works for the computer software company Ansys, Inc. Ansys develops software used specifically by engineers of all disciplines across the globe to simulate and validate physical problems. Because the software is user-definable, companies like Northrop Grumman Corporation and Corning Incorporated can each use the software to solve their unique problems under different user-definable conditions. Through this exposure I have obtained a solid understanding and appreciation of the types of issues the engineering world is currently facing. I learnt how technology has afforded a cost-friendly means to build physical models. I saw first-hand the three-dimensional models that engineers conceive to test their theories and solve problems. I became amazed by the roles science and math play in the world.
Sciences and math are my favorite classes and I have great respect for the teachers who make chemistry, math, and physics fascinating each day. I truly look forward to attending these classes and learning the fundamental concepts engineers use on a daily basis. Chemical engineering represents a college-level continuation of the areas I enjoy studying in high school.
The Carnegie Institute of Technology will provide me with an excellent education and preparation to approach and solve the world's most difficult chemical engineering challenges. I know the faculty at CMU understands and encourages the passions of its students, which leads to a unique environment for learning. I want to learn from and contribute my talents to that very special collection of intellect and dedication known as CMU.
Loved it. Very detailed and shows how far your really are interested in CMU.
Goodluck!