Johns Hopkins additional essay: Why JHU? - because of it fame and its industrious envrionment

In your personal statement on the Common Application, you explained why you are seeking to transfer. Please explain in detail why you wish to transfer to Johns Hopkins University specifically. (1-500 word limit).

This essay is only additional. My personal statement for JHU names "Chemistry sparked my first friendship - Johns Hopkins University essay"
If you can help me with it, I would be so grateful. Please help me with that XD
For this additional essay, my paragraph is short so I hope it is strong enough to prove my determination of attending this school. Please give it a look and give it comment as well.

Johns Hopkins University immediately impressed me with it high ranking in engineering. Being an international student, I find it hard to get a job or an internship in chemical engineering field without attending a prestigious institution. Therefore, I have always dreamed of studying at JHU, a school packed with industrious and innovative engineering students. I want to come here to share my chemistry passion with science lovers in school as well as to prepare a wonderful background for my future working in a renowned company as a chemical engineer. (89 words)

To me this paragraph just seems a little generic. You tend to overstate things a little bit - like using "wonderful", or "renowned" but your paragraph seems to lack specifics. This paragraph could apply to almost any school - why do you want to go to Johns Hopkins in particular? What draws you to this specific university?

Thank you for your last comment. I have just revised my essay. Please take a look
Johns Hopkins University immediately impressed me with its high ranking in engineering. Being an international student, I find it hard to get a job or an internship in chemical engineering field without attending a prestigious institution. Therefore, I have always dreamed of studying at JHU, a school packed with industrious and innovative engineering students. I look forward to sharing my chemistry passion with science lovers in school as well as to preparing a comprehensive background for my future career in a renowned company as a chemical engineer. (89 words)