'the Kimmel center' - WHY NYU? Supplement

Why NYU?
The view from the 8th floor of the Kimmel center was simply breathtaking. I looked down and saw the tranquil scenes of Washington Square Park and the many buildings that line the New York City Skyline. I went down to the street level and saw with my own eyes the atmosphere of the city. As I walked around I saw so many people and cultures. Only in New York can one actually find a Mexican, Indian, and Chinese restaurant all in the same street. Also the food around the campus is to die for. You simply cannot enjoy food like unless you were in New York. After seeing these sights I simply fell in love with NYU. The aroma and atmosphere of NYU is so unique. No other university (in my opinion) could offer this level of diversity in such neat package. Another that drew me to NYU is the infinite internship/job opportunities that come with living in New York. With NYU there are no boundaries that separate the actual city with the campus. They are one in the same. New York will be my classroom. More importantly, the academic rigor and difficulty of NYU is a whole another adventure itself. I picture myself at Bobst library studying my nights away. I know that NYU will prepare me with my dream of becoming a doctor, especially with the leadership and guidance of some of the brightest professors in the country. I can also continue my educational endeavors at NYU's many portal schools. The setting at NYU is amazing. I can't imagine myself at any other school.

I think you could substitute columbia or any other school into this essay and it would still make sense. I think you should focus on the portal schools because that's something NYU prides themself on. If you can go over this essay and you cant substitute another school, then it will be great. Please check out my common app one. Thanks!

Hey Michael I think you talked a bit too much about NYC instead of NYU. I've noticed that most ppl applying to NYU have a tendency to do that. while the city life is a part of NYU, it is not everything there is to NYU. Since you said you want to be a doctor, expand on how being in the city will increase your opportunities etc. Maybe even highlight a club you might join, or a study abroad program that interests you. That will make it unique to NYU alone. Good Luck!

Pls help with my Mount Holyoke Supp. Thanks! =)

I agree, you talk to much about NYC, you have to show why you so badly want to go to NYU, why you are right for the place!

I think this is a great essay.
My only adicve is instead of saying "The view from the 8th floor of the Kimmel center was simply breathtaking. I looked down and saw the tranquil scenes of Washington Square Park and the many buildings that line the New York City Skyline." I would just SAY what you saw. I think that it would be a better attention grabber.

Just my opinion. :D

Hope this helps

i feel this essay bounces around way too much. you give a line or two to every topic you bring up. cut some of your points out then add depth to the remaining ones. say why diversity is important to you. why the openness of the campus is good.

I agree^^
i think You stay focused on one topic and elaborate on that

It's only in New York where one can find a Mexican, Indian, and Chinese cuisine on the same street. You simply cannot find food like this in any place but New York.==> Chicago too. :C

It seems the common theme is diversity..you could focus on that. Otherwise nice word choice, interesting read.

Good luck,
I'm applying to NYU too (ABU campus)