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*Explain how you responded to a significant challenge that you have encountered and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)
Throughout my high school years, I have been a consistent honour roll student due to my competitive personality. However, it was not until my penultimate year of high school, did I truly realize the root of the meaning: "Genius is one percent inspiration, ninety-nine percent perspiration" -T. Edison.
The shock is still fresh in my mind; the moment I held with trembling hands, my ultrasound report. "Large paratubal cysts. 25cm (right) and 15cm (left) respectively. Possibility of malignity is unknown". Within a few minutes, my mother decided to bring me to Taiwan, where she could find a competent surgeon as this surgery could determine my life. Despite my reluctance to abandon my studies, I left for Taiwan, understanding that health is above everything even if this leave of unknown duration will significantly and negatively affect my grades.
As I am writing this, it has been a month and I have returned from a successful surgery. To my surprise, I managed to pull my grades up and conquer the academic disadvantages I face through self-determination and efficient time management. After this epiphany, I am confident that my dedication will put me above others in the competitive Bachelor of Science Program.
*Explain how you responded to a significant challenge that you have encountered and what you learned in the process. (maximum 200 words)
Throughout my high school years, I have been a consistent honour roll student due to my competitive personality. However, it was not until my penultimate year of high school, did I truly realize the root of the meaning: "Genius is one percent inspiration, ninety-nine percent perspiration" -T. Edison.
The shock is still fresh in my mind; the moment I held with trembling hands, my ultrasound report. "Large paratubal cysts. 25cm (right) and 15cm (left) respectively. Possibility of malignity is unknown". Within a few minutes, my mother decided to bring me to Taiwan, where she could find a competent surgeon as this surgery could determine my life. Despite my reluctance to abandon my studies, I left for Taiwan, understanding that health is above everything even if this leave of unknown duration will significantly and negatively affect my grades.
As I am writing this, it has been a month and I have returned from a successful surgery. To my surprise, I managed to pull my grades up and conquer the academic disadvantages I face through self-determination and efficient time management. After this epiphany, I am confident that my dedication will put me above others in the competitive Bachelor of Science Program.