Learning from people around me - UBC application

PROMPT:

TELL US ABOUT WHO YOU ARE.

HOW WOULD YOUR FAMILY, FRIENDS, AND/OR MEMBERS OF YOUR COMMUNITY DESCRIBE YOU? IF POSSIBLE, PLEASE INCLUDE SOMETHING ABOUT YOURSELF THAT YOU ARE MOST PROUD OF AND WHY. (MAXIMUM 1500 CHARACTERS)

One thing essential to know about me is acne, but it's not the acne I am proud of, rather, it's the qualities I learned from acne experience that later became a part of me.

From my acne experience, I learned to drink at least 3 liters of water everyday and I can proudly say the water I've consumed is as much as 20 bathtubs for the past two years! One day, my English teacher approached me with a huge water bottle and said I motivated her to hydrate. I was touched by how consistency could be a form of inspiration to people around me, so I brought this trait to bigger things in life such as leading the Charity Art Club with consistent effort rather than bursting all my passion at once. I am proud that my "consistency" is not just integrated with the small stuff, but also allowing me to take on greater responsibilities.

Now as a senior, I know exactly how underclassmen with acne feel, which always motivates me to reach out. I would observe and help in different approaches. For example, while some people might be looking for skincare advice, others might feel uncomfortable discussing it. As situations demanded, I adapted. Sometimes, I would provide a detailed plan for my sister; I would stand up for the freshman who got taunted. Other times, by simply showing my worst acne picture or making sure to not bring up acne topics to the table would make my friends with acne feel better.

In my community, I am often described as a detailed oriented, consistent and an empathetic person, at UBC, I strive to embrace these traits as well as learning from people around me.

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While you are discussing an interesting story about how acne made you a better person, that is not the point of this essay. We are talking about a question that should be discussing varied facets of your character in relation to the way you deal with and communicate with people around you. Drinking a bathtub full of water and saying that it refers to to "consistency" is not the way a teacher should be viewing you. The observation from your teacher should come from an academic or teamwork standpoint, the same as the the community or friends opinion should come from how you treat others or help them out. The reference to your parents is badly missing in this essay so you have to fix that reference as well.

By the way, you cannot use acne as a reference to being prouud about the lesson(s) you learned from it. Mostly because the requirement is for one single proud moment that shows a notable accomplishment on your part. It does not relate to seperate incidents of what you may consider to be learning moments. Learning moments as not the same as "proud moments" or a proud moment as referred to in this essay.