Prompt: Please share a pivotal moment in your educational career when you have taken initiative of your own learning, and what you gained from that experience.
I left my junior year confused, slightly out of touch with reality, along with no clear concise idea of how I wanted to move forward with my life. Due to this confusion, I made the decision to attend the Georgetown Medical Institute, which is an eight day institute that aimed to teach high school students about the medical field. Being offered the capability to learn and have exposure to something like this was really important for moving forward from my state of confusion.
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I think your topic is pretty good but you should tackle it in a different way. Maybe try being more specific. Why was everything at the institute so amazing? How did it push you towards education? Maybe focus on a particular moment during the institute that struck you. Try being as specific as possible.
I think you have a great start , but I also believe that you should go further into why the institute inspired you so much.
Revised Mary Washington Essay?
Prompt: Please share a pivotal moment in your educational career when you have taken initiative of your own learning, and what you gained from that experience
After my junior year, I attended the Georgetown Medical Institute in Washington, DC. At the time, I was extremely set on a career in the medical profession. I was prepared to learn as much as I could. This week inevitably changed my life and perspective, and was pivotal in getting me to the point I am now.
I was sitting in the middle of dark lecture hall. It felt desolate, despite being surrounded by about a hundred others. Whispers were echoing from every corner of that dark room. The lecture was about to start, and a radiologist named Dr. Aykut Uren was coming to speak to us. Suddenly, the stage lights flashed on and an older man was sitting on a chair with an iPad in the middle of the stage. The entire room went silent. His voice and presence commanded attention and respect immediately. Those same people who were so distracted earlier were completely fixated on Dr. Uren. This was when I realized that I wanted to teach. I saw what he was able to command from people, not out of force, but out of a curiosity from the audience and knowledge he possessed. They connected through this shared desire for that knowledge. I wanted to be able to do that in the same way and pass on what I have learned to others, but also learn from others. I discovered, through that experience, that teaching can be one of the greatest gifts you can give someone.
