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Library, books, socializing - MIT significant challenge, help, comment, correct



mjellma 6 / 24  
Dec 29, 2009   #1
MIT - challenge you faced. (200-250)

The library - my shelter through middle school.
Books - my sole companions.
Socializing - ridiculous! Who needs it?!
This was the life I led until the day I was faced with the real world.
A locked door with a "Closed for this week" sign on it stood between me and my dear books. Reluctantly, I returned to my classroom, to pass my break doing... what exactly?, who with?.

For years I had let my curiosity take the upper hand, and had gradually lost myself in the journey to seek knowledge. Now, without my books I was alone, vulnerable, the shell I had created oh so carefully for years was gone. As I stood there thinking of what had become of me, a girl who used to have friends, real breathing ones, I understood my faults. I had isolated myself completely, and that way had lost touch with reality.

For the next years of high school I changed. By simply talking to knew people, sharing my world with others I once again found the real me. I started from scratch to form new relationships, ones which today I can't imagine the world without. I was determined to succeed; even though a bumpy road lay in front of me, I started my journey enthusiastically. The reward was friends, lots of them, who I now appreciate as much as my books.

No day goes by that I don't secretly thank fate for opening my eyes. I am no longer alone.

birthdayattackr 2 / 12  
Dec 29, 2009   #2
By simply talking to knew people, sharing my world with others I once again found the real me.

The one thing you might want to think about is how your portray this as a challenge. Obviously, not having many friends is something that nobody wants, but from your essay, it seems as if you got along just fine without friends, so it seems kind of unmotivated as to why you wanted friends...do you get what I am saying?


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