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LIBRARY: SECOND HOME (QUESTBRIDGE SHORT RESPONSE)


rettabby 1 / 4  
Mar 25, 2015   #1
If you could change one thing about your community, what would you change and why? (100 words limit)

During middle school, I did not have a computer or a printer at home and my mom worked long hours. My only resort was the public library.It was my second home; I could escape to magical places by reading books.The children section was and still is full but the teen section is almost isolated.Most teens in my community are not education-oriented and just want to get money to assimilate to the latest trends. I wish that teens would frequent the library more often because it would enable them to expand their knowledge and improve their school performance.

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btrfly7 - / 15 6  
Mar 25, 2015   #2
My only resort was the public library.

My only resort was the public library. (Just add a bit about why this was your only resort. Something like: "...because it provided the tools I needed to complete my assignments and...") It was my second home because I could escape to magical places by reading books."

2nd paragraph should begin..."The children section was and still is full but the teen section is almost isolated" because it is a new topic.

..." just want to get money to assimilate tokeep up with the latest trends."

NIce start here. Just remember to begin new paragraphs with new topics because it makes for a clearer understanding for the reader. Also, when proofing your draft, it is a good idea to elaborate with more details in an area where the reader is left wondering why? or what? as in paragraph one here. Good luck!
OP rettabby 1 / 4  
Mar 25, 2015   #3
Thank you @btrfly7 ! I will apply all your advice. I don' t know how I am going to be able to keep it at 100 words though ):
OP rettabby 1 / 4  
Mar 25, 2015   #4
I changed auntie to "friend" because she is just an acquaintance


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