life is just a game where we can be winners or losers -attribute of personality -MIT essay

It's still v1.0 i think i need to update? Will you guys help me on that?

What attribute. of. your. personality. are. you. most. proud. of., and. how. has. it. impacted. your. life. so. far.? This. could. be. your. creativity., effective. leadership., sense. of. humor., integrity., or. anything. else. you'd. like. to. tell. us. about. (*) (200-250 words)

The Challenges life offers us put us in different positions, in those of joy, happiness, agitation etc...; life is just a game where we can be winners or losers, but always participants. I see life as a long marathon, where every step I make, makes me feel happier, because of the fact that I am being challenged and I have the chance to win. Always relying on my sense of humor the obstacles I face every day seem easier to surpass. Whenever I am confused by a difficult Math problem, or I am sad and disappointed after losing a soccer game, a bit of humor can make the sadness and confusion vanish. Though humor cannot solve our problems, it can make them much more enjoyable, and can help us keep the optimism.

My sense of humor has played a vital role in keeping excellent and stable relationship with my friends. Humor is very beneficial in communicating with my friends. It is also very useful in alleviating stress and fear. For instance: My class and I were all impatiently waiting for our Chemistry test results, we were so nervous and stressed that it seemed like nothing could cheer us up. For a moment we all stopped worrying about the results, and started telling jokes. The stress and nervousness were gradually diminishing. Humor is a powerful tool that has an effect not only on binding people together and bringing happiness, but also on triggering healthy changes on individuals. No wonder humor is considered as a priceless medicine. (264 words)

I need to make it 250.

I think you're essay has a lot of potential. However, at the moment, your essay has a kind of list-like, science paper tone. Try to make it less logical and more spontaneous. After all you're writing about humor. Personalize it. Instead of writing generalizations about humor in people's lives, what did jokes did you tell your friends waiting for the chem results? How did your friends react? Use actual jokes!!! Open with an anecdote.

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"You can sleep at my house, I'm sure there's a free bed" I told my cousin after he broke a glass. My uncle was very mad at him, but I could see the smile on his face. A bit of humor was mitigating his anger.

Always relying on my sense of humor the obstacles I face every day seem easier to surpass. Whenever I am confused by a difficult Math problem, or I am sad and disappointed after losing a soccer game, a bit of humor can make the sadness and confusion vanish. Though humor cannot solve all our problems, it can make them much more enjoyable, and can help us keep optimistic.

My sense of humor has played a vital role in keeping outstanding relationships with my friends. Humor is very beneficial in communicating with my friends. It is also very useful in alleviating stress and temper.

A friend of mine was having a vocal quiz, and the teacher asked her what was? She replied:" I know what that is, but I don't know how to say it". Laughing I told her "So why don't you write it down". Everybody started laughing out loud, even the teacher who at first was very nervous.

Humor is a powerful tool that has an effect not only on binding people together and bringing happiness, but also on triggering healthy changes on individuals. No wonder humor is considered as a priceless medicine.

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philosophy* was?

I know that your essay focuses on your sense of humor, but I feel that you use the word too often. Perhaps try to find a different way to phrase it because it gets tiring for the reader to keep repeating "Humor".

It sounds like you are attacking your friend/bring her mood down. I don't know the situation so sorry if I misinterpreted.
"sad and disappointed" exact same words

Thank You Guys , but in general Did you like it?

The supplement is alright. It seems rushed. You should use more concrete details and elaborate on certain points within the supplement. I feel that you should elaborate on how you are most proud of your humor.