My life goal is to have a Computer Engineering degree and go to North Texas University

Please check for grammar and punctuation its due on the 7th thank you.

Life goals essay

My name is Victor Nyandika. This is my first year as a college freshmen. My goals are to get a computer engineering degree and go to north Texas University.

When I was in high school I was always on the computer all the time, coding and solving problems in my Ben barber class I realized liked it my teacher would introduce me to new problems and I would solve it I like solving problems because there's logic always behind it and it's very challenging.

The reason I picked North Texas as my goal is because it's affordable and they have a dedicated computer engineering facility,I can also drive back home in a matter of hours, to see my family my cousin also goes there too and he tells me the people and faculty are great there and I can network with people and get any support I might need.

Right now I'm at TCC, I have goals planned out so I can get my basics done and move on to core classes. First, I'm going to have to see my adviser about what I need to do and get things done so I can transfer to North Texas I need to look for scholarship money and a job.

In my first academic year I will take core classes that will be my head start in college
While I am free during that time I will study for my tests for my classes and visit my adviser to check up on how I'm progressing and how my grades are and tell him my problems or what should I do if I'm stuck between what classes, I should need and give me a heads up on what to do next for my first year and so on.

If I'm stuck in a financial situation where I can't pay for my classes or books I will need to apply for scholarship's and have found some that will push me to excel and be more competitive in school. I will join men of color for scholarship money because that is where, I can push my knowledge and hardworking skills to the fullest.

Victor, your academic background is quite interesting. However, there was no need to post a detailed version of it in the forum. What we really need to see here is the essay prompt and your essay that answers the prompt from the university. We can help you put the essay together using the information you provided, but first, you need to write the essay. Just telling us that this is your life goals essay does not give it a direction nor relevance. The relevance of your life goals and its importance comes from the essay prompt from the school. It tells us what the university expects to read about your life goals. After we learn about the expectations of the university regarding the content of the essay, we can help you direct the essay towards answering and fulfilling the expectations of the admission officer.

Your current version tries to answer a prompt, but because you never stated what it was, we can't really tell if you successfully answered it. Right now, the essay is overly long and as such, is cluttered with seemingly unnecessary information. We can help you pick out the information that will address the prompt as soon as you post that information here. For now, it is really difficult to create an opinion or make suggestions because you seem to be trying to cover too many topics and offer too much information for the essay to have a concrete direction.

Kindly post the prompt as soon as possible so that we can better help you edit and revise your essay :-)

Sorry about the title, I ment to say Computer Engineer.
I go to Tarrant County College southeast campus

Heres is the prompt its from the power point from my instructor.

Purpose: Keeping in mind that your goals need to be reasonable, measurable, and achievable, write a Life Goals Paper that discusses your goals, why you chose them, how they reflect your values and dreams, and how you plan to achieve them. Make sure you are SPECIFIC in detailing how you will work to achieve your goals. For example, if one of your goals is to successfully complete your courses this semester, you need to explain the specific steps you will take to reach that goal (study for 2 hours each night, attend tutorials once a week, etc.)

- In each paragraph, you should introduce the goal, how it reflects who you are and your values, why you want to achieve this goal, and how you plan to achieve it.

o The paper needs to end with a conclusion paragraph.

o Your paper needs to begin with an introduction that introduces the purpose of the paper and what is to come. Make sure you include a strong thesis statement.

o The body of your paper should have at least one paragraph for each goal.

Its for a big part of my grade for my transition to college success class so I really need to pass it.

- This is a very weak introduction. It does not really provide a strong thesis statement for you. There is no need to introduce yourself and your background. Rather your thesis statement should present your life goal immediately and then present an overview of how you plan to achieve that life goal. Your succeeding paragraphs should only work on detailing your overview statement.


- This is not your goal. This can never be your goal because you can attend any school in order to complete your degree. Instead, your focus should be on stating a life goal along the line of "My goal in life is become one of the leading and notable names in computer engineering in the future. In order to achieve this goal, I have created a 10 year career plan for myself" This is what your introduction should contain.


- The first 4 years of my plan involve completing my computer engineering degree as the top graduate of my class. I plan to complete this goal by spending... ( talk about your study habits)

- The next paragraphs should detail your work plans which should include working at Silicone Valley, developing software and apps during your free time that you hope to sell to the highest bidder, or ideas along those lines.


- This is a very weak conclusion and does not instill confidence in your plans as a student. I have already provided you with template content for a life goal essay. Just follow the instructions and you should be able to pull this off :-)

Don't hesitate to let me know if you have any questions, I'll be glad to guide your through this paper :-)

Thanks :-)