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Your personal statement should speak to your academic goals and why you think you will be successful at The University of Iowa. Include any additional information that you feel is important to tell the admissions committee. Examples might be related to academic commitment, extracurricular activities, creative talents, aspirations, family circumstances, opportunities/experiences, factors affecting your academic record, or why you are applying to Iowa.
I live in Beloit, the city at the "bottom" of the state. We share the same economic issues as the rest of the nation, and in our population of 30,000, you will be able to find just about every culture. To an outsider, Beloit is filled with bad neighborhoods, gang violence, and schools with low test scores. Take a closer look; scratch the surface, there is so much more. Each person that lives here has a different story. Some have lived here their entire life, while others may have just moved here. These people, the ones that live in bad neighborhoods, and those who come from different economic situations, no matter what color their skin; they are the people I attend high school with.
Friday night football games and friends you won't forget accompany the 24 credits needed to graduate. You would think this was your typical high school, but there isn't much that is typical at all. Every time I sit in a classroom there is a possibility that the girl sitting next to me has a professor as a parent, and the boy sitting next to her has a parent in jail. A classroom with 28 students is a classroom with 28 perspectives.
I attend a high school in which we have been taught more than you can read in a text book - a place in which diversity is abundant. The stories many students read about poverty and ethnic struggles, I grew up living in the middle. The knowledge I have gained can't be bought, and it is my knowledge and perspectives I want to share.
Your personal statement should speak to your academic goals and why you think you will be successful at The University of Iowa. Include any additional information that you feel is important to tell the admissions committee. Examples might be related to academic commitment, extracurricular activities, creative talents, aspirations, family circumstances, opportunities/experiences, factors affecting your academic record, or why you are applying to Iowa.
I live in Beloit, the city at the "bottom" of the state. We share the same economic issues as the rest of the nation, and in our population of 30,000, you will be able to find just about every culture. To an outsider, Beloit is filled with bad neighborhoods, gang violence, and schools with low test scores. Take a closer look; scratch the surface, there is so much more. Each person that lives here has a different story. Some have lived here their entire life, while others may have just moved here. These people, the ones that live in bad neighborhoods, and those who come from different economic situations, no matter what color their skin; they are the people I attend high school with.
Friday night football games and friends you won't forget accompany the 24 credits needed to graduate. You would think this was your typical high school, but there isn't much that is typical at all. Every time I sit in a classroom there is a possibility that the girl sitting next to me has a professor as a parent, and the boy sitting next to her has a parent in jail. A classroom with 28 students is a classroom with 28 perspectives.
I attend a high school in which we have been taught more than you can read in a text book - a place in which diversity is abundant. The stories many students read about poverty and ethnic struggles, I grew up living in the middle. The knowledge I have gained can't be bought, and it is my knowledge and perspectives I want to share.
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