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I just recently discovered this forum and I'm so glad that there's something out there like this to help with editing.
This is the intellectual vitality essay for Stanford:
Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or experience you have that you find intellectually engaging.
In today's modern world, where news is instantaneous, communication is possible with the press of a button, and technology allows us to go where no one has gone before-boundaries take on a whole new realm. Where do human limitations end?
In our thirst for independence, we have tried to define freedom as escape from all limits-but just like complete freedom is a mere aspiration, limitlessness is the human fantasy.
This fantasy perhaps rose from the Industrial Revolution era, when resources were exploited, and now, we are slowly facing the exhaustion of the "limitlessness" of resources. With this mindset, society is slowly becoming embarrassed of anything which doesn't flaunt progress, technology-limitlessness. A simple game of tennis doesn't satisfy our need for exercise anymore; we require sensor technology and a virtual court.
The humanities have been preaching the concept of limits. Greek mythology has been teaching us for ages that with the rise of Oedipus, there is a fall of Icarus. Mary Shelley's Frankenstein, a warning against the modern man during the Industrial Revolution, underscores the Promethean myth in which the quest to surpass limits, only leads to self destruction.
What intrigues me about human culture is that we are so focused on succeeding, that we forget about the intangible limits which stop us. As paradoxical as it may be, I believe we are inherently a romantic society, governed by no precincts, yet we lead rational lives. We attempt to live limitlessly, we attempt to achieve limitlessly, and we attempt to sustain limitlessly, but are we really oblivious to the limits we face, or are we just acting ignorant?
The constraint upon us is not the condemnation it may seem. As humans, or earthly creatures, we are innately capable of living not only within natural limits but also within cultural limits. We are only recently realizing the impending threat of limits in the form of global warming and downward economic trends.
There is in no way that we can bring back the trees we've cut down, or sew up the hole in the ozone layer. What we can do, is realize our limits (1800 characters), and do the best we can with them.
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Although my essay talks about my interest in sociology and modern human culture, my future goal is actually to attend med school. Would it be smarter to write an essay which links to my future goals, even though I also have a great interest for the humanities?
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PLEASE EDIT THIS. RIP THE ESSAY APART. I feel that it is a tad ambiguous at times, and I'm not sure if I'm properly answering the prompt.
Any comments are greatly appreciated!
Thank you so much!
I just recently discovered this forum and I'm so glad that there's something out there like this to help with editing.
This is the intellectual vitality essay for Stanford:
Stanford students are widely known to possess a sense of intellectual vitality. Tell us about an idea or experience you have that you find intellectually engaging.
In today's modern world, where news is instantaneous, communication is possible with the press of a button, and technology allows us to go where no one has gone before-boundaries take on a whole new realm. Where do human limitations end?
In our thirst for independence, we have tried to define freedom as escape from all limits-but just like complete freedom is a mere aspiration, limitlessness is the human fantasy.
This fantasy perhaps rose from the Industrial Revolution era, when resources were exploited, and now, we are slowly facing the exhaustion of the "limitlessness" of resources. With this mindset, society is slowly becoming embarrassed of anything which doesn't flaunt progress, technology-limitlessness. A simple game of tennis doesn't satisfy our need for exercise anymore; we require sensor technology and a virtual court.
The humanities have been preaching the concept of limits. Greek mythology has been teaching us for ages that with the rise of Oedipus, there is a fall of Icarus. Mary Shelley's Frankenstein, a warning against the modern man during the Industrial Revolution, underscores the Promethean myth in which the quest to surpass limits, only leads to self destruction.
What intrigues me about human culture is that we are so focused on succeeding, that we forget about the intangible limits which stop us. As paradoxical as it may be, I believe we are inherently a romantic society, governed by no precincts, yet we lead rational lives. We attempt to live limitlessly, we attempt to achieve limitlessly, and we attempt to sustain limitlessly, but are we really oblivious to the limits we face, or are we just acting ignorant?
The constraint upon us is not the condemnation it may seem. As humans, or earthly creatures, we are innately capable of living not only within natural limits but also within cultural limits. We are only recently realizing the impending threat of limits in the form of global warming and downward economic trends.
There is in no way that we can bring back the trees we've cut down, or sew up the hole in the ozone layer. What we can do, is realize our limits (1800 characters), and do the best we can with them.
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Although my essay talks about my interest in sociology and modern human culture, my future goal is actually to attend med school. Would it be smarter to write an essay which links to my future goals, even though I also have a great interest for the humanities?
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PLEASE EDIT THIS. RIP THE ESSAY APART. I feel that it is a tad ambiguous at times, and I'm not sure if I'm properly answering the prompt.
Any comments are greatly appreciated!
Thank you so much!