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"For those who are lost, there will always be cities that feel like home" - Boston Univ. Application



thiisbrazilian 1 / -  
Aug 13, 2016   #1
Tell us why BU is a good fit for you and what specifically has led you to apply for admission. (250 max)

"For those who are lost, there will always be cities that feel like home," said Simon Van Booy. Thankfully, I had the chance to grow in a largely populated city the majority of my life. Since I have returned to America I have been living in the suburbs, hence to move to a college within a city such as Boston, where every sort of opportunity is within your reach as one of my aspirations. Boston University is also home to one of the most diverse schools in the country. Coming from a small city, Lowell, that is well known for its diversity, and the capital of Brazil, filled with people from all over the world, it is nearly crucial to keep such lifestyle going through my college years. Uniquely, one of my favorite things at Boston University is the school's miXx K-Pop Cover Dance Crew. As an admirer of the Korean culture, I was astonished to know that the university had such program, therefore, it is an interest of mine to audition to the group if possible. Consequently, besides its great academic programs, the university has influenced me to apply due to its highly recognized research program. I hope to observe and contribute to some of the most interesting projects that may have a significant impact not only to me but to the world, such as the Zika pandemic, raising significant and international concern, so forth that new global policies should be developed to decrease the spread of such disease.

I may be beyond 250 words and I'm also unsure if I should add some sort of conclusion to it. Any help or constructive criticism is accepted!

molly16 9 / 10  
Aug 13, 2016   #2
Hi,

here are my correction for u:
... grow in a largely populated city the majority of my life
... i had the chance to grow up in a lot of populous city

... I have been living in the suburbs outskirt) , hence to move (...) such as Boston,hence to extend my college in urban area such as Boston, ... ....

- Boston University is also home to one of the ...Boston University is very unique and different with other schools in the country.

- Coming from a small city, Lowell, that is well known for its diversity, and the capital of Brazil, filled--it is verb? -- with people from all over the world, where is the 'verb'? .........., it is nearly crucial to keep ...

i guess you have mistakes on 'verb'.

Uniquely, one of my favorite things at Boston University is the school's miXx K-Pop Cover Dance Crew...., I;m really fond on the school's miXx K-Pop Cover Dance Crew in Boston University

don't forget to elaborate your statement with more uncommon world or collocation.


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