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I love weather in Boston, diverse environment; Boston U Supp/ Why apply?



sakin 1 / 5  
Dec 25, 2012   #1
In no more than 250 words, please tell us why BU is a good fit for you and what specifically has led you to apply for admission?

As I write these words I'm defying my reality. I need to get away from this reality and unchain myself from the crippling hands of insecurity and low expectations. I live in daydreams because my reality does not support my dreams, the girl that is alive in mind and heart is ready to come out and Boston University is the place that can help her become alive. The diverse and globally minded environment of BU is what she needs. BU is the place for me to grow and find people that will inspire me to become the strong, leading woman I aspire to be. I have dreamed in silence for so long, but I'm ready to turn on the lights and open my eyes to the world so that I can be part of it and change it. BU is the school for me because I would love the weather of Boston, its energy and its global connections.

Chloemoon 3 / 5  
Dec 25, 2012   #2
Great essay! It's persuasive, but somehow the wording seems awkward.

I have dreamed in silence for so long, but(maybe add now ) I'm ready to turn on the lights and open my eyes to the world so that I can be part of it and change it.

You may also want to stress on some aspect of your image so that people could get a clear picture of you. Imprint them.

Good luck!

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