'Made in China. ' - Cultural Background

Please tell us more about your cultural background and identity in the space below (100 word limit).

Made in China.
Both of my parents are born in China and immigrated to the USA, where they had an "ABC", an American-Born Chinese, me. I have had the opportunity to indulge in both cultures; the Chinese customs and the American ones. My parents would often have a family Christmas celebration and then the Chinese New Year celebration the next month. We would eat the stereotypical rice but with a drink in our hands. In our household we encourage the Asian worth-ethic with the american freedom, a mix that has taught me to work hard towards my goals.

Okay. First I LOVE the "made in china" part. Shows your sense of humor! Establishes your voice! Great.

With this topic, there is soooooo much that you can say. But, at some points I think you are wasting precious characters.

For example "where they had an "ABC", an American-Born Chinese, me". You have already established your humor, I don't see the need for this.

"I have had the opportunity to indulge in both cultures; [b]the Chinese customs and the American ones[/b ]." You have already establish the second half of that sentence.

Instead, maybe you can say something about how being in amerced two cultures help you better understand your Chinese culture or better appreciate these cultures differences. Or maybe you can expand upon the balance between the two cultures ("Asian worth-ethic with the american freedom") .

These are just a thoughts. It's a good start but I think you can say so much more with it.

I think overall it's a good response, however, I wouldn't get rid of the ABC thing it adds charm

I liked. It really shows who you are and your sense of humor.

In my opinion you could cut this: where they had an "ABC", an American-Born Chinese , me.

Good luck!

Can you check my Mexico essay perhaps? thanks