this is my essay, please give me feedback! I'm not a native speaker so there might be spelling/comma mistakes. ;)
I remember those warm sunny days, on the playground as a young girl. I used to swing so high, my feet nearly touched the branches. I would feel like nothing could ever stop me, like I could touch the clouds if I wanted to and tried hard enough.
At fifteen I won a scholarship to attend a UWC. Being surrounded by highly intelligent overachievers made me feel like I wouldn't be able to keep up with their pace. The frustration I experienced upon discovering my limits threatened my motivation and determination to crumble. However, with time I came to realize that the power of being the best does not compare to a strong community of individuals with different strengths and the ability to support and teach each other. Accepting my weaknesses, while appreciating my strengths by remaining humbly confident took courage. During my first year at the UWC I began what I hope will be a lifelong journey of majoring in unafraid.
I remember those warm sunny days, on the playground as a young girl. I used to swing so high, my feet nearly touched the branches. I would feel like nothing could ever stop me, like I could touch the clouds if I wanted to and tried hard enough.
At fifteen I won a scholarship to attend a UWC. Being surrounded by highly intelligent overachievers made me feel like I wouldn't be able to keep up with their pace. The frustration I experienced upon discovering my limits threatened my motivation and determination to crumble. However, with time I came to realize that the power of being the best does not compare to a strong community of individuals with different strengths and the ability to support and teach each other. Accepting my weaknesses, while appreciating my strengths by remaining humbly confident took courage. During my first year at the UWC I began what I hope will be a lifelong journey of majoring in unafraid.