This my essay for common application. I will appreciate if someone can give some advice.
At 12:00 a.m., I was almost dead. My legs were senseless. Sweat streamed down but I couldn't wipe it. The sun roasted my neck and arm as if I was a steak in the furnace. This was the boring, tough life during the military training. We had to get up at 5 o'clock in the morning, stand still for 2 hours, and run for 5 thousands meters, shouting loud and clear slogans. We repeated the simple and boring "At ease" and "Attention" thousands of times. We acted like robots, which did everything in unity, walked in the same pace, and shouted the same words.
"Let's make some difference. I just can't stand the boring days here." I said to my 7 roommates, "Let's add some fun to the atmosphere. We can make up a chorus named 404 (our room number), to sing during the interval."
"But that will be awkward, Benny, and the instructor may not allow us to do so." was a typical response to my proposal.
"Why not just have a try？"
The fourth day of the training was the beginning of a new era. At the interval after one-hour standing at attention, we stood in front of the group of people without asking the instructor. Admittedly, it was a little awkward, but funny at the same time. It may be the most interesting moment for the first four days. I started, "Hello everyone, we are 404." It was a little embarrassing. "And we are going to sing a song for all of you at the interval." At that moment, to my surprise, our training instructors encouraged the students to applaud, and then we started to sing.
"I say remember this moment..." we started with Taylor Swift. When we were getting more and more confident in singing, our voice was like gentle breeze relaxing everyone. After our perfect harmony for the last line "One day, we will be remembered", they applauded even louder. They shouted, "One more! Four O Four! One more! Four O four! " they shouted freely, with endless laughter. Therefore, we sang another one, Hey Jude, and all my classmates beat beats by clapping hands to accompany with our song. We put smiles on their grim faces.
After the success of the first show, every interval became the show time of 404. Many other students also joined in the "interval show", and some of them even danced, rapped and played the guitar. We started to make jokes, to laugh more and to feel less tired every day. What' more, 404 became famous across the campus. Some instructors from other classes even invited us to sing for their students. We were like super stars on a world tour, reminding everyone that the military training was boring didn't mean that we had to be as well.
I believe that no matter where we are or what we are doing, our lives can always be filled with happiness and humor. Life shouldn't be a suffering training, but a melodic song mixed with gentle breeze. With that belief, I can't imagine that the old people lead inanimate lives, so I gathered some of them together to form an art group. We held a talent show in our community, which I believe makes them feel so young. With that belief, I try to explore the artistic beauty of codes when I attend computer programming classes; I propose to have a basketball game among my classmates every weekend; I share a piece of poem every day with my classmates even on the day before we had final exam. I know that people all have many goals to accomplish, big dreams to pursue and great effort to make, so do I, but if we can pay attention to the details of life, if we can finish everything even better, and if we can create a happier atmosphere, then, why not?
Let's make some difference
At 12:00 a.m., I was almost dead. My legs were senseless. Sweat streamed down but I couldn't wipe it. The sun roasted my neck and arm as if I was a steak in the furnace. This was the boring, tough life during the military training. We had to get up at 5 o'clock in the morning, stand still for 2 hours, and run for 5 thousands meters, shouting loud and clear slogans. We repeated the simple and boring "At ease" and "Attention" thousands of times. We acted like robots, which did everything in unity, walked in the same pace, and shouted the same words.
"Let's make some difference. I just can't stand the boring days here." I said to my 7 roommates, "Let's add some fun to the atmosphere. We can make up a chorus named 404 (our room number), to sing during the interval."
"But that will be awkward, Benny, and the instructor may not allow us to do so." was a typical response to my proposal.
"Why not just have a try？"
The fourth day of the training was the beginning of a new era. At the interval after one-hour standing at attention, we stood in front of the group of people without asking the instructor. Admittedly, it was a little awkward, but funny at the same time. It may be the most interesting moment for the first four days. I started, "Hello everyone, we are 404." It was a little embarrassing. "And we are going to sing a song for all of you at the interval." At that moment, to my surprise, our training instructors encouraged the students to applaud, and then we started to sing.
"I say remember this moment..." we started with Taylor Swift. When we were getting more and more confident in singing, our voice was like gentle breeze relaxing everyone. After our perfect harmony for the last line "One day, we will be remembered", they applauded even louder. They shouted, "One more! Four O Four! One more! Four O four! " they shouted freely, with endless laughter. Therefore, we sang another one, Hey Jude, and all my classmates beat beats by clapping hands to accompany with our song. We put smiles on their grim faces.
After the success of the first show, every interval became the show time of 404. Many other students also joined in the "interval show", and some of them even danced, rapped and played the guitar. We started to make jokes, to laugh more and to feel less tired every day. What' more, 404 became famous across the campus. Some instructors from other classes even invited us to sing for their students. We were like super stars on a world tour, reminding everyone that the military training was boring didn't mean that we had to be as well.
I believe that no matter where we are or what we are doing, our lives can always be filled with happiness and humor. Life shouldn't be a suffering training, but a melodic song mixed with gentle breeze. With that belief, I can't imagine that the old people lead inanimate lives, so I gathered some of them together to form an art group. We held a talent show in our community, which I believe makes them feel so young. With that belief, I try to explore the artistic beauty of codes when I attend computer programming classes; I propose to have a basketball game among my classmates every weekend; I share a piece of poem every day with my classmates even on the day before we had final exam. I know that people all have many goals to accomplish, big dreams to pursue and great effort to make, so do I, but if we can pay attention to the details of life, if we can finish everything even better, and if we can create a happier atmosphere, then, why not?