I would appreciate some feedback on this short essay, especially on grammar and vocabulary
Thanks in advance: Topic: Describe and extracurricular activity
When I applied to work as a facility manager for a youth travel organization, I found my job not to be anything like I had expected. When I started my duties in Pakostane, a small village in Coratia my first year, I thought I was solely responsible of the maintenance of and the construction on the camp site. However, I soon discovered that I would also play vital roles in stage performances, and entertainment of our young guests.
Since I was very shy back then, I had a lot of trouble talking in front of a crowd in the beginning. However, I soon adapted, and the anxiety of performing for a group slowly subsided. Soon, I was even able to get a crowd to dance along with me, a huge personal success.
I learned a lot from this experience. I didn't just get to know the most interesting, most open minded people, but I also got to know how important some character traits like communicativeness and openness are. I also realized how important first impressions are. However, I especially learned how rewarding it can be to push myself to overcome personal fears.
Thanks in advance: Topic: Describe and extracurricular activity
Overcoming Personal Tears
When I applied to work as a facility manager for a youth travel organization, I found my job not to be anything like I had expected. When I started my duties in Pakostane, a small village in Coratia my first year, I thought I was solely responsible of the maintenance of and the construction on the camp site. However, I soon discovered that I would also play vital roles in stage performances, and entertainment of our young guests.
Since I was very shy back then, I had a lot of trouble talking in front of a crowd in the beginning. However, I soon adapted, and the anxiety of performing for a group slowly subsided. Soon, I was even able to get a crowd to dance along with me, a huge personal success.
I learned a lot from this experience. I didn't just get to know the most interesting, most open minded people, but I also got to know how important some character traits like communicativeness and openness are. I also realized how important first impressions are. However, I especially learned how rewarding it can be to push myself to overcome personal fears.