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"to meet more different people in my life" - DIVERSITY



mayrooo 1 / 3  
Dec 31, 2010   #1
We could learn a lot from crayons; some are sharp, some are pretty, some are dull, while others bright, some have weird names, but they all have learned to live together in the same box. ~Robert Fulghum

I read these words on a board outside Sayreville Middle School every day. This not only expresses my love for crayons but it also describes how I see people around me. People often ask me how I can imagine my life as a box of crayons, but to me my theory makes perfect sense. In life you encounter people that are so different that they surpass your imagination and expectations, and it is because of these people that my life becomes colorful. Every person I meet is like a crayon, a new piece to my crayon box.

The Bedazzled Blue crayon is one of the smartest people in my collection. Mariam is the girl who is always at the top of the class, prepared to learn something new and have fun with it. We can be found in the library all the time, trying to make sense of what is written in our text books. She is the one that I studied with to achieve the grades that I have, staying up at night with mugs of coffee to keep us awake and the soft voice of Enrique Iglesias keeping us company. She has really taught me to work hard because in the end it never goes to waste.

Sana Rehman always is ready to laugh and socialize. This Yellow Banana Magic Scent crayon is passionate about meeting new people and getting to know more about them. We have made it a habit to sit next to a different person in school every day so that we can learn more about them. She is someone I can have fun with no matter what the situation. I am always laughing with her on absolutely everything. She has taught me to have fun with the little amount of life I have.

The Black crayon is the most essential one, the one that is worn out the most and always finishes first. It is with this person that my love for cooking developed. My mother has to be the best cook I know and she has taught me everything about food. Many people in Pakistan have forgotten old recipes and traditions of food but since my mother has learnt them she has passed them down to me. Besides the Pakistani cuisine, we always try out our own recipes. We can be found in the kitchen at 3 a.m. making Pakoras or even smelling herbs to see what possibilities there are for putting them in our recipes. The kitchen is my favorite place since there I can cook and also because there are always people from everywhere sitting in the kitchen, who have stories to tell and are always hungry for our food.

Every person in this world is different and they all have the ability to teach you something and shape up the person you are. Every single crayon in my little yellow and green box has made a huge impact on my life by doing the littlest things. I hope to meet more different people in my life so that I learn new things and my life becomes a kaleidoscope of colors.

debater514 6 / 17  
Dec 31, 2010   #2
In my opinion, I feel this essay is a little short. I would recommend that you expand on the more general approach you take at the end of the essay, and that will give you the correct length and content necessary.

The title that comes out at me is "Crayons"
EF_Kevin 8 / 13053  
Jan 28, 2011   #3
People often ask me how I can imagine my life as a box of crayons,---this seems like a strange thing for people to often ask you.

to me my theory makes perfect sense. This is not good, because it is not actually a theory. A theory is something different. This is more like a metaphor.

I stared at this essay for a long time, and I think I would like to cut the whole intro and just start abruptly with this awesome sentence:

The Bedazzled Blue crayon is one of the smartest people in my collection. Mariam is the girl who is ... and at the end of this paragraph, you can have a thesis statement. That will make a great intro.

If you start with the quote, and then go to the bedazzled blue crayon, you will have the start of some powerful writing. :-)


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