"I have the dog walk and the sensory details it provided to thank for beginning what has become new way of thinking about myself and how I live."
I think a word is missing right before 'new.'
I'm wondering if I was too specific in my "world", by confining it to one specific place?
I don't think so. I think this is good. Specialization is good in the modern world, because everyone is specialized and everything has been done.
...talking away countless hours with a dear friend who was to depart soon for a new home across the country.--- I moved soon! Maybe you like it this way, or maybe now. I felt like soon was out of place at the end of the sentence.
Oh! I have a great idea! Take this and put it at the beginning of the paragraph, of the whole essay:
Perhaps it would be wise to find out exactly how memories are stored...
It is an awkward segue if you tack it on to the end of this para about the friend and the scene, etc... but if you have it at the beginning.. and the paragraph ends with this:
How aware I must be of my mind's eye as I age in order to preserve my experiences!--- I got rid of 'through.'
So, do you see what I mean? The first sentence of the essay can be the one that begins with 'perhaps,' and I think that would be intriguing. It would also make it so that the whole para is about preserving memories.