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'Mexico-born dad' - someone that influenced me in my life.



Marihdz 1 / -  
Dec 17, 2007   #1
I dont know. Im not a very good writer. Does anyone have any suggestions?

The people that get to know us best, from our virtues to flaws, are our parents. They have the greatest influence in our life because they are the people we see the most and have known for the longest. They sacrifice many luxuries in order to give their children the best life possible. My father has had a huge impact on my life and it is because of him that I am the person I am today. Most people say I am a lot like my dad, both physically and mentally. We both have the same mannerism, facial expressions, and thought processes. We love to learn and travel, eat exotic and luxuries food, spend time with family, and we both have an incredible amount of energy. From observing my dad's behavior and listening to his lectures, he has had a great influence on my life, choices, and personality.

My dad was born in Mexico City to a well-off family. He never had any discomfort or traumatizing experiences in his childhood. My dad's life changed though when he found out that my mom had become pregnant with me. They were not married and were very young: my mom being 19 and my dad 23. He made the decision to marry my mom and get a job. It was a rude awakening for him when he started to have monetary struggles, and all the comfort he had as a child quickly went away. Soon his life became a worry about paying the bills and putting food on the table. Aside from all his struggles, my dad never lost hope and kept on working hard to improve his family's quality of life. Finally he made the decision that it would be best to move to the United States and start a business. We moved to Brownsville, Texas, because it is right on the border, and my dad had started an import/export company. It was a huge struggle to get the company started, and (for many years) the business did badly. Finally, after about 6 years of effort, the business started to do fairly well. Soon, my dad was able to open two more offices: one in Laredo, Texas and another in Mexico City. Presently the business is doing very well, and my family lives very comfortably. My father was able to lift our family off the ground because of his perseverance.

My dad's ability to improve his family's life has inspired me to always try my hardest to get the best out of life. Thanks to him, I have more opportunities than he had at my age. I feel that if I do not take advantage of everything he has provided for me, I am being lazy and a disappointment to him. I believe that if my dad was able to achieve such a comfortable life with very little to start out with, I should be able to do the same because of all the advantages I have compared to him. My dad's story makes me realize that there are no excuses for me not to reach my goals. My dream of being a successful independent woman will become a reality if I constantly work and fight for it. I admire my dad so much and his major influence on me is that he has made me a very determined person. I never give up, even if I feel my adversities can sometimes be overwhelming. For example, in elementary school I always had a problem with my spelling. In 6th grade my parents discovered that I had dyslexia and needed therapy to improve my spelling. I found my dyslexia very frustrating and it interrupted my learning. After a few months of going to classes, my handicap had become less severe, and I felt I could deal with it on my own. I had to convince my parents that I no longer needed the classes. They finally agreed to let me drop the classes if I promised to keep my grades high. I did the exercises on my own and read many books to keep my dyslexia under control. I have complete control over it now, and I have never needed any special circumstances in class due to my dyslexia. It is not difficult for me to keep up with my classmates that do not have a learning disability. This drive that my father has inspired in me since an early age will always help me in any difficulties I encounter in my life.

EF_Team2 1 / 1703  
Dec 18, 2007   #2
Greetings!

Where in the world did you get the idea that you are not a good writer? Your essay is extremely well-written! :-) In fact, it needs very few corrections. I have only a few suggestions for you:

from our virtues to our flaws, are our parents. They have the greatest influence in our lives

We both have the same mannerisms, facial expressions, and thought processes. We love to learn and travel, eat exotic and luxurious food,

They were not married and were very young, my mom being 19 and my dad 23.

We moved to Brownsville, Texas, because it is right on the border, and my dad started an import/export company.

Your dad sounds like a great person and so does his daughter! ;=)

Best of luck in your studies!

Thanks,

Sarah, EssayForum.com


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