2 MIT short essays about hobby and department preference

Propmt 1:Tell us about something you do for pleasure of it.
My greatest hobby is teaching math for freshman students.
In order to prepare for each session I open my old notebook full of problems. When I look at those problems, I experience nostalgia for those days when I had fun by solving tough questions.

Like me at their age, they come to math class to get medals and to become elite of our school.
Therefore I always remind them consequences of doing math for fame. I wanted them not to repeat my mistakes of losing best friend. I hope that they will understand purpose of competitions earlier than I did...(100 words)

Prompt 2:Which department or program at MIT appeals to you and why?

Computer science and pure mathematics appeal me most as a double major program. I realized that after lecture of Terence Tao on prime numbers at IMO-2009. I always was interested with mysterious objects like distribution of prime numbers. I even went to the math because of its enigmatic formulas which were needed tremendous work to comprehend.

When I first participated in ACM, I understood power of virtual intellect. Computers worked out some combinations in seconds, while it would take me days to do so.

With help of these subjects I will shed light on most mysterious things in the world.(100 words)

Please give some feedback on those essays. I will appreciate all kinds of comments.

Moderators,please don't delete my threads.I am obeying all the rules of EF.

Thank you in advance.

Hello! Thank you for helping others here at Essay Forum! I don't know why your posts have been deleted, perhaps the titles were not descriptive enough?

My greatest hobby is teaching math to freshman students.

Like I did at their age, they come to math class to get medals and to become the elite of our school.

Therefore I always remind them of the consequences of doing...

I wanted them not to repeat my mistakes of losing my best friend. I hope that they will understand the purpose of competitions earlier than I did...(100 words)

Prompt 2:

I realized the answer to this question after a lecture by Terence Tao on prime numbers at IMO-2009.

I always was interested in mysterious objects...

By learning more about these subjects I will be shed light on the most mysterious things in the world.(100 words)

I see a topic that attract my mind to read this essay, the idea is there but you need to learn how to develop it. unlike me find a good topic that would grap other reader mind.

Could you please be more clear?What aspects of the idea should I develop?Provide more examples?

The second essay has plenty of examples in my opinion. The first essay is kind of hard to add more examples cause its talking about math...so it may be fine just the way it is. Also, I like the addition of "math for fame" it comes across as a nerdy thing - which is something MIT will like. Caltech too...if you are applying there.