MIT ESSAY: The most significant challenge I've faced. Rebuild my life in a different country

Hello,
I had really no idea what to write on this one.
My English is not perfect, I tried to do my best.
Do you think that this short essay is too weak? Or that I can ameliorate it by changing a few things?
Thank you

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Tell us about the most significant challenge you've faced or something important that didn't go according to plan. How did you manage the situation?(*) (200-250 words)

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In 2012, me, my parents, and my two brothers moved to Ibiza, in Spain. I had already moved several times in my life, but this move was by far the most important. All my precedent ones were in the summer, and were more or less fifty miles moves, so the changes were quite soft. I changed of school, of friends, but I was still able to see them sometimes, the same for my entire family who wasn't very far away.

The 17th of March 2012, my whole universe changed. My parents decided to move, and one month later it was done.
I didn't speak a word of Spanish, and had no idea of the Spanish culture. Everything happened very quickly and it was a very brutal change. The integration was very difficult, France and Spain are very different in terms of the people, the culture, the way of life and obviously the language.

I had to rebuild my life, integrate myself, make new friends and learn 2 languages (Spanish and Catalan) starting from nothing. And now, after four years, I speak perfect Spanish and good Catalan, I've made new friends, and I'm totally integrated into the local culture.

I consider this experience as the most significant challenge of my life. It wasn't easy to remake everything but I did it successfully and I have no regrets.

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In 2012, me , my parents, and my two brothers and I moved to Ibiza, in Spain.

All my precedentprevious ones were in the summer, and were more or less fifty miles moves, so the changes were quite soft.

Although I hadto leave my firends and family and had to changeof schools, offriends , but I was still able to see them sometimes, the same for my entire family who wasn't very far away.because they were not far away.

and had no idea I knew nothing about of the Spanish culture

MOD: edited - only English please!

Thank you very much @amounenaitlho!

by the way itried ti give you some more advice in franch and they deleted it. I just said that you need a better conclusion. Since you have some more word space I think that you should add a summary of the points that you mentioned and add a compelling closing statement

Good Luck

Okey, thank you!
I'm going to do that